Blessed Be The Name

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Just now wrote this... Please review, criticize,tear apart, destroy, ect. and comment. THanks! :)

Blessed be the name
Of the Lord our God most high.
Blessed be the name
Of the God of Abraham
Blessed be the name
Of the Lord our God most high.
Blessed be the name
Of the God of Isaac.
Blessed be the name
Of the Lord our God most high
Blessed be the name
Of the God of Jacob.
The God of Israel.

Lord, without you
What are we worth?
Lord, without you
Who are we, just Sinners.
Lord, without you
We live in a world that is fallen.

Blessed be the name
Of the Lord our God most high.
Blessed be the name
Of the God of Abraham
Blessed be the name
Of the God of Isaac.
Blessed be the name
Of the God of Jacob.
The God of Israel.

Lost and alone
In a place that knows no rule.
What do we do now?
What can we do?
How can we get back
To Your perfect will?

Blessed be the name
Of the Lord our God most high.
Blessed be the name
Of the God of Abraham
Blessed be the name
Of the God of Isaac.
Blessed be the name
Of the God of Jacob.
The God of Israel.

Our bloody sacrifice
You gave; Your only son.
Free from sin, we come back
To the place,
Free to worship You.
Free to worship You.

Blessed be the name
Of the Lord our God most high.
Blessed be the name
Of the God of Abraham
Blessed be the name
Of the God of Isaac.
Blessed be the name
Of the God of Jacob.
The God of Israel.


Lord, without you
What are we worth?
Lord, without you
Who are we, just Sinners.
Lord, without you
We live in a world that is fallen
Last edited by Broken^Minded^Warrior on Thu Mar 12, 2009 6:45 am, edited 2 times in total.
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Wow, the first verse seems way too long to me! Try shortens it or breaking it into two verses instead. The first verse could use more punctuation. God was very repetitive, that was good for repetition.

Lord without you
What are w worth? I'm guessing you meant what are we worth.
Lord withot you
Who are we; sinners.
NO semicolon, put a question mark and capitilize sinners.
Lord without you
We live in a world that is fallen



It was very soft and sweet, good job.
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Thank you, Colt! Your crit is very helpful! (Seriously, it is!)

Sorry about all the misspelled words... my brother turned off all of the spell checks...

Also, welcome to YWS! :)
Last edited by Broken^Minded^Warrior on Thu Mar 12, 2009 6:43 am, edited 1 time in total.
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Oh thanks! You are welcome. Now I have more time on my hands, I'll see about more to my review.

Our bloody sacrafice (sacrafice is spelled wrong, it should be sacrifice)
You gave; Your only son (I think your should be lower-cased)
Free from sin, we come back
To the place;
comma, not semicolon
Free to worship You.
Free to worship You.
Oooh...more alliteration. I like it.

Erm...don't forget to use the spell check above this thing you type in.
"We would accomplish many more things if we didn't think of them as impossible." Vince Lombardi

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These were autumn mornings, the time of year when kings of old went forth to conquest; and I, never stirring from my little corner in Calcutta, would let my mind wander over the whole world.
— Rabindranath Tagore, The Cabuliwallah