Abortion of Emotion (Death Metal)

(Roar)
(Screams)
Hear this loud shit mother fucker! (Stretched)
(Screams)

(Fast guitar solo)

(Roar)
You just can’t wait for me to get injected!
So then I could get infected!
Then I could become a huge fucker like you
Get the fuck out of my face!

You understand that I am different!
You know what I am good and bad at!

(Frustrated)
I feel the liquid flowing inside me
I don't believe that this has to be
I feel it killing the good side of my soul

(Heavy Melody)

(Roar)
You do it again and again mother fucker!

(Heavy Metal Melody)

(Frustrated)
No matter how hard I will try
They don’t give a shit they will inject the liquid inside of me till I die
My goodness goes’ away

(Roar)
But they think its fun!

Nice,
Gentle,
Friendly,
But they don’t give a shit!
They will give me another injection hit

(Calm)
Sometimes I dream to leave without a trace
So I wouldn’t live in a disgrace

(Roar)

Abortion of emotion
Abortion of emotion
Abortion of emotion
Abortion of emotion

You inject inside of me the
Abortion of emotion!

You inject inside of me the
Abortion of emotion!

You inject inside of me the
Abortion of emotion!

(Scream)

(Roar)
Come on!

They want me to be like everyone!
Listening to their shit isn't fun!
What do you want from me?
So I would die or get angry and go on killing spree?

NO
I am just what I am!
Damn, you still can’t accept me!
No matter how hard I try!

Nice,
Gentle,
Friendly,
But they don’t give a shit!
They will give me another injection hit
Come on mother fucker stop wasting your life!


(Heavy Metal Melody)

Abortion of emotion
Abortion of emotion
Abortion of emotion
Abortion of emotion

You inject inside of me the
Abortion of emotion!

You inject inside of me the
Abortion of emotion!

You inject inside of me the
Abortion of emotion!

I am not scared of you!
I will stand up for myself!

(Whisper)
We will stand for our self…

Ooh! Death Metal!
I thought this was 'cool'. I could imagine the song in my head, which was fun and interesting as well.
I love your title name: It seems so original and unique, but I suppose some people might say the song was 'whiny' or 'emo' but I think it's awesome!

Bad Bits:
Too much swearing.
Too repetitive at times.

All in all: Cool. Do you think that you'll write the melody for this?

I will put this in mined. Yea I do have a heavy melody for this.

Hey, lordgluzman!

Nice emotion here! Really powerful. I love the calm rift in the middle; those are always really important when a song is trying to make a big impact. My only suggestion however, would be that those calm lyrics would be just a little bit longer, since this song is already pretty lengthy. Not that I suggest repetition of those lines, just a little more to them.
Think of it like the eye of a hurricane: calm and still, and then once it passes, boom! Nice job applying that analogy, by the way.

I can definitely hear this song in my head, and let me just say that I love it! xD
If you play, I really hope you write some music to go along with it. It would be amazing! The guitar solo in the beginning would definitely be awesome.
Having said that, let me admit that I'm a big fan of screamo/metal, so my opinion is slightly biased.

NO
I am just what I am!
Damn, you still can’t accept me!
No matter how hard I try!

Awesome verse.

And the last line was great. Fantastic job!
*Gold Star*


~anti-pop

i like it... but its hard to read metal lyrics on paper... they always look too over the top without the screams and that

this is incredibly slipknot-esque. you a fan?

Okay, Gluzman. Here I am, sorry for the wait.

I feel the liquid flowing inside me
I don't believe that this has to be
I feel it killing the good side of my soul

I like this verse. It flows alrightily (is that a word? ), and I like the imagery. I also like the fact that there's not swearing here. Haha.

They want me to be like everyone!
Sometimes I feel so angry I want to shoot them from the gun!
What do you want from me?
So I would die or get angry and go on killing spree!

On the first line, 'everyone else' would be more correct. And 'shoot them from the gun' doesn't really sound that good. If you put in that 'else' in the first line, could you make it still rhyme by replacing the gun thing, which feels a little out of place?
Also, considering the singer is asking a question here, I believe there should be a question mark in the end of the fourth line.

(Roar)
But they think its fun!

Excuse me and everything, but I think there was something hilariously sweet about this. It's a good thing. Also, remember the apostrophe!


I also liked the whole 'Abortion of emotion' metaphor. If I were into this kind of music, I would find this very good. I don't anything about this genre, but I think you did pretty well. It's great that you also have a melody for this.

Hope this helped!


Demeter
xxx

erratik_statik wrote:i like it... but its hard to read metal lyrics on paper... they always look too over the top without the screams and that

this is incredibly slipknot-esque. you a fan?

I pray to Slipknot! I made this song by useing slipknots melody named "People=Shit"
When I grow up I will be in a great metal band like they are. I will wear masks of demons, murders and shake the world!