I know a song I wrote awhile back...Please Crit!!!!

An empty room never sounded so loud
I hate the way that he plays the crowd
Its just a game that he plays to win

Yea I know he plays it.
I know the games that he plays.
That one mistake he made lead to his shame.

Now I fall back with no one to catch my every tear I ever shed
I ask myself where I went wrong
It was him all along

Yea I know he plays it
I know the games that he plays.
Thanks to him hopes all I have,
To save my day

I know his lies
I know his tricks
Hopefully I don't fall for them, ever again

Yea I know he plays it,
I know the games that he plays,
Its just a game he plays to win
I hate to say this but I'm in love with him.

Not bad. I liked that it wasn't your typical mushy love song, but more I really wish I didn't love you, but I do, and that makes me mad. It needs some work, it's a little messy. There rhyme scheme doesn't make much sense, like, sometimes the the first two lines rhyme, then the last two, then the second and fourth, and so on. The punctuation needs work too, because it starts out with none, then each line ends in a period, then theres none, then it's all over the place. And I know that it's part of the chorus, but you used the word "play" too much. Like, its OK if its used more than once because of the chorus, but try not to use it three lines in a row. Try rephrasing it or finding a synonym or something. All in all, this was pretty good.