When I'm With You

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You've got me under your spell
And we're riding towards hell;
There's no turning back, though I'm not sure I'd want to.

Hey, you break all the rules.
Babe, you act a damn fool,
But there's something there, something brilliant about you.

I don't know
If I can
Take this shit
Anymore.

But you keep me coming back, your enigma pulls me in.

When I'm with you
I see the stars explode
Beyond the reach of reality.
When I'm with you
I feel my heart being ruined
As you're standing in front of me.
When I'm with you
I know you bring me down,
But it feels like I'm falling free.
When I'm with you --
You're fucked up and you're cruel,
But that's the way it's supposed to be.

Tonight I'm walking on air;
I pray that's something we share,
As we joke and laugh and I fall deeper for you.

Then you leave me without word
Imagining I have heard
That you said you loved me and I said I did too.

I don't know
If you did
If I would,
But I can.

And you keep me coming back, your enigma pulls me in.

When I'm with you
I see the stars explode
Beyond the reach of reality.
When I'm with you
I feel my heart being ruined
As you're standing in front of me.
When I'm with you
I know you bring me down,
But it feels like I'm falling free.
When I'm with you --
You're fucked up and you're cruel,
But that's the way it's supposed to be.

When I'm with you
I can't see myself for the light.
When I'm with you
Life just seems a worthless fight.
When I'm with you
I'm about to let go and just fall.
When I'm with you
None of that seems to matter at all.

You'll be there;
I'll be there too.
You're my air
And I want you.
You'll ruin me,
But I don't fucking care --
I just want to let go
And be
Just me.

When I'm with you
I see the stars explode
Beyond the reach of reality.
When I'm with you
I feel my heart being ruined
As you're standing in front of me.
When I'm with you
I know you bring me down,
But it feels like I'm falling free
When I'm with you --
You're fucked up and you're cruel,
But that's the way it's supposed to
be.




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this is good. i couldn't read anything wrong with it, but for a song it might be a little too long. I got the feeling that it would go to metal or heavy rock music, or maybe something like evanescence.


When I'm with you
I can't see myself for the light.
When I'm with you
Life just seems a worthless fight.
When I'm with you
I'm about to let go and just fall.
When I'm with you
None of that seems to matter at all.

^^favorite stanza




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Hello! This is a really good song, i also thought that heavy rock, metal, would make the song POP! The lyrics are good, i really liked how you used the word enigma, thats such a fun word to say! Hee hee!

I dont want to repeat past comments, but yes, it might be a bit long.

This isnt a major issue but i didnt quite understand

" But it feels like i'm falling free. "

would that be the same as free falling? Once again not a big issue because it rhymes with the lyrics.

Cant wait to read your next big thing


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