creativity

that surreal harmony
electric drugs capture ones vivid sense
a white shimmer screams to form
with every demand give an impression
not to waste our questions
on abstract silhouette
observe young
craft out of suffering

Oh my God. This poem's about to fall off the page and still no reviews. That's sad. So I will review it.

Well, my first impression is that it's kind of weird. No punctuation, no grammatical correctness whatsoever...my inner grammarian would like to bop you in the head with a stick.

My second impression is that it has some powerful images and the disjointedness...kind of works. I really liked the first part, but the last three lines threw me off. I think "silhouette" should be plural and the last two lines just didn't fit. I'm sorry I don't have a better explanation than this. Maybe you could reword them so they fit better with the rest of the piece.

Overall, jarring, but in a good way. Still could use some cleaning up, though. Keep writing!

i dont get it......i think you should explain/expand more on your subject, give it depth and meaning.(if you didn't alredi try that lol) Throw some imagery in there. Those were just a few ideas, hope it didnt sound 2 harsh.