ALove amongst the spheres delivers the mountain & the me

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A Love Amongst the Spheres Delivers
The Mountain and The Meteor

(pt.1 Romancing Planets)
Out in the endless sea of stars and ether lived the spheres

Like us, they were worlds unto themselves, always separated from each other but always able to become close

All of them the same in a number of ways, yet all of them unique in countless ways.

Of the spheres-in time- came two particular spheres, an Amethyst Planetoid and a Pale Moon.

Like most of us would, the two spheres engaged one another in a romance ,
theirs however was of a more “gravitic” nature

But unlike most of us a love most pure arose between them
This love ignited and became a great star…a sun to the devoted spheres

in it’s luminescence the Amethyst planetoid shimmered while the Pale moon gleamed.

Then

Off in the capricious waves of the abyssal horizon ,
Chaos in it’s perpetual madness and loathing of contentment

Launched a beam, and upon this beam rode a particle of dissension
That struck the heart of the sphere’s burning love, corrupted it
and killed it.

In its death throes, the love of spheres released a wave of flaming destruction

The two spheres were spared but had been reduced to mere fragments of what they once were.


(pt.2The Mountain and the Meteor)

The Two former spheres streaked the dark planes of space as fragments, Victims of a love denied.

The two fragments traversed the cosmos on their own macabre paths.

the Amethyst planetoid lived on as a hateful meteor, striking down all heavenly bodies in it’s flaming path. Leaving a trail of pain and wrath.

The Pale moon lived on as a lonely comet, flying away from every other cosmic body,
frozen in a glacial fear of new love, seeing it as an invitation for more pain.
Leaving a frigid tail of woe that congealed all that crossed it.

After an eternity of suffering, probability roused fate to the conclusion of reuniting the fragmented lovers.

The lonely comet had fallen into the gravitic avarice of a dark star, the star of despair.
Under the pressure of the dark stars force the comets icy fear melted into watery sorrow, as a pale mountain was revealed. This mountain was streaming rivers of tears, in which the dark star reveled as it readied itself to devour the comet.

At this time the Hateful meteor bore down on the dark star and struck it through the core.
Breaking through the other side the hateful meteor made contact with the comet.
The meteor dried the comets tears of sorrow, as the comet quenched the meteors flames of rage

The star of despair released all of the remnants of the spheres it devoured in times past
the Meteor and Comet gathered up these remnants
in deep reflection and the two remembered the love lost between them.

And with each remnant gathered came a promise from each of them to rebuild their love

And so the two become one, a new being, a new sphere
A whole planet that flourished with life and purpose born from a radiance within.
Last edited by Monument Soul on Thu Jan 15, 2009 8:39 pm, edited 1 time in total.




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There's something very special about this poem. I don't know what, maybe it's the slight abstractness of it, maybe it's the fact that it's on a huge level (if taken literally, I'm sure if I analysed this in greater depth I'd be able to pick up a few symbolisms). It's even quite disturbing, seeing as you made me feel momentarily sympathetic towards two (fictional?) celestial objects.

There's also a bit of reality in this. There is something strangely romantic about the way planets interact with eachother.

Anyway, this was a brilliant poem, not to mention unique (as far as I am aware, anyway). I'm hoping to see more like this!
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Face Engine wrote:There's something very special about this poem. I don't know what, maybe it's the slight abstractness of it, maybe it's the fact that it's on a huge level (if taken literally, I'm sure if I analysed this in greater depth I'd be able to pick up a few symbolisms). It's even quite disturbing, seeing as you made me feel momentarily sympathetic towards two (fictional?) celestial objects.

There's also a bit of reality in this. There is something strangely romantic about the way planets interact with eachother.

Anyway, this was a brilliant poem, not to mention unique (as far as I am aware, anyway). I'm hoping to see more like this!


in truth I don't know why people always call my stuff "meta-physical" and "abstract" but I'm just naturally drawn to write stuff like this...and I write a bunch of stuff!! and often!!!
y'know, if you like my style check my other works....

Thank you OOOOH SOOO much for reviewing my writing I am indebted to you :) !!!



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