Now theres a good bit of writing. It's well written, just a few mistakes.
[quote]baseball capsand untying shoelaces[/quote]
Space inbetween "caps and"
[quote]get people lost, Lure [/quote]
No capital at the start of lure
[quote]one of their circled and [/quote]
Circles - typo
[quote]I'll be trappen forever[/quote]
Trapped - typo
[quote]The LIttle People[/quote]
the I does not need capitals.
[quote] I know their secrest[/quote]
spelt Secret
Thats all the errors i can find with it - its nicely written and i enjoyed reading it. What i want to know is anything else coming out of it or is it just a one off passage?
Light travels faster than sound. That is why some people appear bright until you hear them speak.
Never argue with an idiot. They drag you down to their level, then beat you with experience
It's a little short for even a short story. Perhaps you could enter some sort of experience to tell how the person learned of the faeries, or something like that. This would make the story much better than it is.
I detected no overt lack of quality, just quanity.
