Reasons Why Your Poem Is Bad.

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Raimunda
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Sun Nov 30, 2008 4:48 pm
Raimunda says... · Sun Nov 30, 2008 4:48 pm
"Do you really want me to critique this?
It's really really bad
The worst poem I ever read
I kind of wish I never had.

Your tone ... juvenile and arrogant
Your writing insincere
I'm still trying to work this out
Your meaning is unclear.

This "poem" is utterly lacking in depth
What is this? I mean, really?
It was a complete waste of time
Rewrite it, please, more clearly."
Last edited by Raimunda on Mon Dec 01, 2008 10:24 pm, edited 1 time in total.
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Sun Nov 30, 2008 5:08 pm
Prokaryote says... · Sun Nov 30, 2008 5:08 pm
Awesome, you wrote my review for me.

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Raimunda
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Sun Nov 30, 2008 5:25 pm
Raimunda says... · Sun Nov 30, 2008 5:25 pm
lol.
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I need my daily Smallville fix
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*writewatiwant*
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Sun Nov 30, 2008 5:39 pm
*writewatiwant* says... · Sun Nov 30, 2008 5:39 pm
don't know what to say.... I liked the theme and how it was like you were directly talking to someone.... But it kindda is something to just read and... well it's not very good. Sorry...

Keep writing! :D
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*writewatiwant*
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Tue Dec 16, 2008 6:21 pm
*writewatiwant* says... · Tue Dec 16, 2008 6:21 pm
Completely changed my mind!
:D :D :D
i absolutely loved this :D
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Fri Dec 19, 2008 11:44 pm
jules4848 says... · Fri Dec 19, 2008 11:44 pm
Haha... I liked this you definitely got your message across. Now I definitely know who not to ask when I want a critique. Just kidding!!

The rythem was good and I didn't really see anything you needed to change!
Keep up the good work, or bad work or... no no good work- I'M CONFUSED!
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Fri Dec 19, 2008 11:57 pm
Gahks says... · Fri Dec 19, 2008 11:57 pm
I love reflexive poetry! I've just got this idea for a new poem, If on a winter's night a poet... - recognise the title?

Punctuation could be improved in places but otherwise, well done on a cute, quirky piece.

Kudos and hugs,

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