Bug Zapper

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I’m really bored and I came up with this a bit ago. So I thought I might add on to it a bit.


Insect: Pa! Pa look!
Dad: What is it?
Insect: look at the pretty colors.
Insect: Can I play with the pretty colors?
Dad: Yes, yes waves his leg with ought looking.
Insect: Heads for flashing blue light.
Dad: looks around for son “where did he go. Wait no not that don’t!?
Insect: Dances around madly. “Pretty colors pretty colors weeee….” Zap!


Mr. Mitchell: “Wow darling that was the 15th mosquito we’ve killed tonight.”

Dad: I will avenge you! Goes in and flies on top of Mr. Mitchell.
“Take that! Dang you!

Smack mushhh….. Rubs hand off on sleeve... “Another one dead.”

The End




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Er. Was that meant to be a serious...anything?

I mean, its really nothing. It's nowhere near the right format for it to be counted as a script, and unless its meant to be a sick ad for an electrifying light, it can't be counted as anything.
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That was... really short. Fine for what it was, but short and rather pointless. Oh, and if you really do write a script there needs to be something that separates dialogue from stage directions.
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