Heroic Poem

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Captain Falcon waits in weary
As he waits for his blowing fury
If you cross him when hes late for lunch
He will hand you a Falcon PUNCH
Captain Falcon has a son
Mr T, oh and Chuck Norris was one
But they were given new names on there checks you see
Both were given unexpectedly
Captian Falcon was born on planet awesome
Where he fought off giant man-eating possum's
God offered him the power of flight or strength
And Captain Falcon took the strength to kill to incinerate
There was a defining crunch
As the possums felt the power of a Falcon PUNCH
With all this you might think me a lire
When I tell you his arm turned into a falcon of fire
When he winds up he starts to yell
The power of his voice like the gates of hell
In later years the planet was peacefull
The streets were crowded and full of people
He started palcking to leave the planet
He grabbed his stuff from his house of granite
He traveled through space just floating around
When he saw a planet which had heavenly ground
When he landed the dust arose
When he climbed out he was met by the Mario Bro's
Then there was an epic battle
The Mario Bro's where tacking a paddle
Then a whole group of others came
A Falcon Punch here a Falcon Punch there ended the game



By Greg E. Foster




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I actually made this up for a poem for my English class, its a mix of captain falcons life and how he got to super smash brothers. lol




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I thought that was a nice and light-hearted poem. Very nice, but you might want to correct some of the lines in there.

For example: God offered him the power of flight or strength
And Captain Falcon took the strength to kill to incinerate

While the rest has a back-to-back rhyme scheme (there's one line, the next line rhymes with first, next line, etc), this part didn't and it sticks out just a little stubbornly. You might want to change that so it isn't so sharply noticed.

Otherwise, that was a fine poem. Very nice job.



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