Where We Belong

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Where We Belong

In my world, which I create with words,
Dragons swarm in the wild, free air.
The grass is green and the sky so blue,
Truly, that is where I belong.

In your world, which you create with steel,
The air is foul (I) can hardly breathe.
There is no grass and the sky is gray,
And that is where you’re trapped to belong.

In my world, which I create with magic,
Brave hearts are ever-ready to rescue.
There is unity, there is true spirits,
Honestly, that is where I belong.

In your world, which you create with greed,
People are selfish, catering only for their needs,
Wars are fought and peace is buried
Is this where you choose to belong?

In my world, which I create with care,
Cruel witches are always defeated in the end.
“Good overcomes Evil”-that’s the first rule
I swear that is where I belong.

In your world, which you create with power,
You let the bad show their wrath and rage.
There is no rule, no promise is kept,
I know that isn’t where you belong.

In my world, which I create with love,
Joy is pure, it knows no end
You are welcome, would you care to join?
Believe me, t’is where we both belong.
Last edited by Sohini on Thu Dec 11, 2008 6:31 am, edited 1 time in total.
Calvin : You can't just turn on creativity like a faucet. You have to be in the right mood.
Hobbes : What mood is that?
Calvin : Last-minute panic.




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Wow, I like this a lot. Your words paint a picture, so nice job!!!

Can I, um... join your world please? lol. But seriously... that does sound like a pretty sweet world.

I don't have anything to suggest really, it is perfect how it is. :) *thumbs up

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I love it, but somehow... when I finished I pictured your world as like... a 'My Little Pony' world...

But, it's still very good!

[quote]In your world, which you create with greed,

People are selfish, catering only for their needs,

Wars are fought and peace is buried

Is this where you choose to belong?[quote]


Love this line! Don't know why but it attracted me more than the others!
You Cry, I Cry.
You Laugh, I Laugh.
You Jump Off Of A Cliff,
I Laugh... Even Harder.




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Oh thank you both so much.

This was posted here a long time back *pouts and points* PostPosted: 21/09/06 and no one replied...

So you two are my saviors for this poem, it is one of my old favourites, dunno why it got comments after 2 whole years.
Calvin : You can't just turn on creativity like a faucet. You have to be in the right mood.
Hobbes : What mood is that?
Calvin : Last-minute panic.



She conquered her demons and wore her scars like wings.
— Atticus