stitches

Stitches


KA THUD ! That was the sound of my body hitting the ground , one summer afternoon while chasing my cousin around the house .

I tried to catch her but she was running to fast .

So i walked a little while and started to run again .

After awhile I was getting tired and when I'm tired I'm clumsy and when I'm clumsy i fall and usually results in me either getting yelled at or me hurting my self and then getting yelled at.

Well here I come around the corner of the house running like no other and all of a sudden boom!!

I landed on the ground .

I felt this sharp pain shoot all over my foot.

So i got up and limped over to the porch and sat down to see why my foot was hurting so bad .

I looked down and saw blood running down my foot and i was starting to freak out so i called my aunt out side so she could see my foot .

Well when she came out side and saw it she was like o my gosh are u ok ?

and I was like NOOO!! I'm not OK.

The skin off of my toe is missing and it hurts!!!!

well out of the corner of my eye I see this long white line on the bottom of my foot and i tried to pull at it and when I did I realised it wasn't a string on the bottom of my foot it was the inside of my foot from were all the oxygen was missing and turned the inside of my foot white .

OK. so know I'm really starting to freak out .

I have a skinned toe and a cut foot .

So she calls my grandma and she comes and picks me and im balling my eyes out right about know because i have the impression that the doctor is gonna have to cut off my foot .

so we get to the hospital and one of the nurses come out with a wheel chair and pick me up and wheel me to one of the rooms and i lay down on my stomach and she gets some kind of bucket and puts my foot over it so i don't get blood all over the place. She goes and gets a bottle of some kind of clear stuff .

Then she went and got a scrub brush and started to clean my foot . So the doctor comes back in and has a needle about as long as half a pencil and draws up some medicine to numb my foot.

Well I'm thinking OK maybe there gonna stick it on top of my foot No, they stick it straight through the bottom of my foot!!! through the open wound and everything !!!

I was like O My Gosh they are trying to kill me !!

Well that part was over so here comes the fun part (which is when they stitch me up).

He pokes me in the foot to see if i felt anything and I said no .

so he says OK here i go and about 11 stitches later i was bandaged up and thought i was ready to go home. But, the fun was not over yet the nurse walks in and is holding a nother needle and I'm like " Are u serious ?!? how much pain am i gonna have to go through ?

Well i wasn't about to give up and just let them give me the shot. So i still got the shot but... it took five nurses to hold me down .

So know I'm ready to go home. I gather up my stuff and hobble down the hall way of the stupid hospital while every one else gets to walk on there own to feet.

we get home and i am stuck in my bed for like 6 weeks and some odd days until my foot gets better. the one thing that i learned from that experience that changed my point of view about wearing shoes when your out side is that if u don't were shoes your gonna lose your foot or get 11 stitches in the bottom of it .

So here's my advice to you when your out side stay clear of trampolines and were your shoes!!!


THE END

Hi,
Welcome to YWS! I hope you'll love this site as much as I do First things first, on this site you need to write two reviews for every post. Preferably before.

So, about you're story... what's the point? You're just telling us what happened when you got stitches one summer. You really need to work on your grammar also and spelling.

If I were you, I would add a lot more to this story then post it in other fiction. Even though it actually did happen to you, it be better there. You can do so much more with it!

- All my edits will be in bold.

Stitches

THUD! That was the sound my body made when hitting the ground.
- That right there can be your opening sentence. Add more detail though. Maybe describe what it was like out. How it hurt. What went through your mind. That kind of stuff.

It was a summer afternoon while I chasing my cousin around the house, that caused me to get stitches.

There is not much else I can do, besides re-writing the whole story. You should look at this story again and ADD MORE DETAIL. Right now its just boring, you're telling everyone about how you got stitches and its not that interesting! Make us care. Tell us how it hurt and what went through your mind.

Add some more to your story then PM me. I'll come back and edit again.

p.s. Sorry for being so harsh. Only your best interests are in mind!

Love,
N

ok i will do!! and dont worry about being harsh thats why im here . so i can get help with my story and make it better thank you for giving me some pointers on it im very buesy right know beacuase my grandpa is in the hospital and i havent been at home . but yes i will re- write it and then get back too you .