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What an interesting topic choice.
It's pretty good except for the fact that you used the wrong form of "there" in one of your lines. And also, you put unecessary apostrophes in words.


Un-speakable evil’s walk the street.

Always on the hunt for there next victims.


"there" should be their, and evil's doesn't need the apostrophe.
R.I.P. MJ. Gone too soon.




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Oops, I think you posted a new topic instead of replying to one. Where's a moderator when you need them? :P
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