Of Cheap Flesh and Produce

"The management apologizes for the poor quality
of the two dollar strawberry punnets.

Most people would think that strawberries,
by virtue of being strawberries,
would be sweet, tender, and desirable,
however
customer feedback informs us
they have a tendency to bruise.

Most people would think that strawberries
in exchange for such a pittance is due to
the reckless voluptuousness of the season
rather than providing incentive
for the purchase of damaged goods
but I didn't love you for being most people.

We hope you enjoy your shopping experience,
Have a nice day."

I enjoyed this

Was it talking about people? That's what I got out of it mostly, like how people may expect others to be a certain way, but often they're not, just like the bruised strawberries?

It was cool.

but I didn't love you for being most people.

Obviously this line meant something to you but I didn't get it. It didn't seem to fit into the poem that well. Maybe clarify and bit more.

But all in all it was very good and I enjoyed reading it.

-Freak

I believe I told you that I think this is wonderful. ^^ I do, it's not conventional in one sense - because of the direct and slightly formal speech, the nature of the poem itself. Yet, it's a poem that has meaning and a sweet sense of purpose.

While you've already mentioned the meaning to me, it is both hard and easy to see that in the poem. I love the way it is, the simple pronouncement in the middle of the announcement.

"Most people would think... but I didn't love you for being most people."

The connection was made with such a subtle fluidity that I had to smile in recognition. The poem demands a second - perhaps even third - reading for understanding. Or, at least, a level of understanding through the poem as a vehicle of meaning. It's touching, but solid, and I think fantastically done.

That line itself, in the third stanza, doesn't fit rightly, the "but I didn't love you..." but I think that's just because it's a surprise. I could see the situation, the tough but pleasant voice over the intercom, a woman - or man, the ambiguity is well done - standing at the strawberries, a punnet in hand. She glaces up and listens, head tilted, tongue against her lips. And the idea is somehow gorgeous, that she should smile, and blush, glancing back at the strawberries, with that almost accidental line.

Yes, I love it. ^^

*Hearts* Le Penguin.

This is Just To Say:

Quite clever, well-done in the form. The lining is good, punctuation is fine, doesn't distract. "But I didn't love you" IS the poem, do nothing to it. If readers need to read it three times, then good. It's worth reading more than once.