Do you hear me crying?

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Gee
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Sun Oct 26, 2008 7:59 pm
Gee says... · Sun Oct 26, 2008 7:59 pm
this was good, and i like the way you've included the bit about how the child doesn't know that its his grave stone, its just a rock with his name on!
that bit is really good.
keep writing because lots of people like this!
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Mon Nov 10, 2008 7:22 pm
*writewatiwant* says... · Mon Nov 10, 2008 7:22 pm
It really made me sad... In other way it's good! i liked how you used vocabulary like you were the little girl that was being abused. Nice work (even if the theme is sad...)
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In short, Mrs. Pontellier was beginning to realize her position in the universe as a human being, and to recognize her relations as an individual to the world within and about her.
— Kate Chopin, The Awakening