You were always There

Hello syd552,

Welcome to Young Writers Society!! I really liked your poem. The meaning is incredible and more people should realize the truth that your poem holds- God is always there for us no matter what. Nice work!

I only saw a few mistakes:

Thought that i was going through life... without anything

There shouldn't be a space after the periods

Thought i was weak
but your strong
Thought i was strange
but you showed me the way
Thought i was useless... but you showed me how to live

First of all, I really liked this stanza. Again, the space after the periods needs fixing. And in the second line it says "but your strong", it should say "but you're strong". You just put the wrong "your" in there, no biggy though

You were Always there for me ...when i thought wasnt free
to live for you
(to live for you....)
You were always there for me... when i thought i couldnt see
to see you
you were always there

Again, the spaces after the periods needs to be fixed. There shouldn't be a space before or after.

...when i thought wasnt free

I think you mean "when I thought I wasn't free"

And the beginning of each new line should be capitalized. Oh and one more thing, words like "couldn't" and "wasn't" should have apostrophes after the "n's". So you see, it was just a little punctuation you were missing. Other than that, great song!!

I really do love it

cheers! Keep on writing
-thevoiceinside

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