A moment (for you)

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wewinwelose
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Wed Aug 27, 2008 12:48 am
wewinwelose says... · Wed Aug 27, 2008 12:48 am
seems like it could be a song but try fixing the first part that's all i dont like....you say bleeding twice
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lshryock2
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Tue Oct 14, 2008 11:05 pm
lshryock2 says... · Tue Oct 14, 2008 11:05 pm
wow!
this is so beautiful in a dark way...!
its kinda has two ways of forming in the mind.
at first i saw the violent side kinda of being sucidal maybe cause of a break-up or hard times.
but then it could go as a metaphor.

I felt like I was stabbed in the back,
my vision was going black.
You looked in my eyes
for a moment- just a moment.
reminded me of a cupple days ago,.
me and my ex got in a huge fight and he said some really mean things and i felt so betrayed and as i tryed to hold in my tears my vision was all blurry
:?
great poem!
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"isn't it supposed to be like this? the glory of first love, and all that. it's incredible, isn't it, the difference between reading about something, seeing it in the pictures, and experiencing it?"---twilight
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We are all broken. That's how the light gets in.
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