My Haikus

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Which Haiku was the best?

  • Right or Wrong? 25%
  • Haiku de Chip No votes
  • Hippopotamus 25%
  • More Haiku Blues 13%
  • Sharks 13%
  • I'm done 25%
  • I hated them all No votes

Total votes: 8

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Okay, this is a collection of my haikus. I was going to put up limericks and poems as well, but I realized that I’d already posted them up. (Willie the Goldfish—Limerick, Willie the Goldfish—four-line poem, and Two Cents were all of my others.) READ AT YOUR OWN RISK (XD lol) Actually, the only one I really like was number one, but I'm not going to make a post for a single haiku.



HAIKU'S


Right or Wrong?

Half the time I’m right,
Sixty percent of the time
I am incorrect.


Haiku de Chip (this is a rhyming haiku, and a bad one as well)

Why would you want those,
When you can have Doritos,
And/or corn Fritos?


The Hippopotamus/Haiku Blues (lol!)

Hippopotamus.
I can’t say anything else
‘Cause line one is used.


More Haiku Blues

I’d like to talk to…
(You) but I can’t ‘cause I’m out…
Of talking room here……


Sharks

Sharks are big and gray,
Well, usually they’re like that.
But one is called “White”.


I’m Done With Haikus For Now

I’ll stop killing you,
Because these aren’t very good,
They’re painful to read.
Last edited by Teh Wozzinator on Sun Feb 10, 2008 2:59 am, edited 1 time in total.
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You know what?

You're actually good! I laughed EVERY single one. EVERY single one.

They were inspiring.

In fact, I'm going to write one right now!

Oh, you're too modest--
no, really, you should be so proud.
I should high-five you!


Terrible, eh?
my world isn't only beautiful
it is so far away




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Haha, wow, thanks!

But about your haiku...

Your second line is eight syllables, it's supposed to be seven! lol! Get rid of the "so" in it, and yours would be good. (Yours made me laugh, too. ;D)
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I liked the first one.
'Sixty percent of the time'
may serve you better.

I really enjoyed
The lovely 'haiku de chip'.
I would not change it.


The next one is good.
But try 'I've run out of lines'
For the last sentence.

The next one is great.
It's perfect just as it is.
A lovely haiku.

I didn't like "sharks'
as much as the other ones.
It wasn't as fun.

The last one was great,
A wonderful conclusion
To your haiku set.

Haha. I'm sorry, I couldn't resist!
"Just like moons and like suns,
With the certainty of tides,
Just like hopes springing high,
Still I'll rise."
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I liked these. They sound like my own haiku drivel... My personal favorite was the first, though the two "Haiku Blues" ones are a close second.


"I Heart Haiku"

Short. Sweet. To the point.
Without the stupid rhyme scheme
Mucking my work up.

I commend you on these... *applause*

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Hey there! Long time no see :-D

'But sixty percent of time'

I know it needs to fit a certain amount of sylablls, but if it doesn't fit, rewrite it. It needs 'the time' to make sense, but then it would't fit I know.

'Why would you want those,
When you can have Doritos,
And/or corn Fritos?'

This one had me in stitches. It was like a mcdonalds advert. :-D

I liked the first and last ones, thy're really good! Actually, that's ironic because the last one is about them being bad, and I liked it. :-)

Anyway, they're not bad!

Keep writing!

~D'Aedomir~
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Sociopath: So • ci • o • path noun
1. Someone who believes their behaviour is right.
2. Human.




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Here's my Haiku

Haiku, hard to write
But me, i beg to differ.
Could be my talent.

I love haikus




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I realize that "Sharks" isn't much like the others, but I'm keeping it up anyways....

Thanks for all the good comments! lol

And TickledPink...

Do you have a comment on my haikus?
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LOL I laughed on everyone single one too. Especially the doritos one.

Hahaha. You have a creative head.

:D

~Mateeah
"Good" writing is married to "bad" writing: something was created, something was tried.




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awsome haiku's
a funny A+ 4 U! my friend lol
if laughter is the best medicine i bet none of your friends are ever sad lol
nice creativity
I have the memory of a goldfish,
The attention span of a squirrel,
But the mind of a WRITER... or a psychopath, one or the other.



I would be a terrible novel protagonist.
— mellifera