That was amazing I love stories like that! You did a wonderful job! You wrote it wonderfully just give a bit more of the characters feelings and it will be amazing! Great job!
I'm a special lover sometimes but you only touch a ghost, I'm a sycophantic courtier wit an elegant repost, Needless to say you're the one I need the most, Cause the only one I come undone for is you.- some lines from Come Undone by Vannessa Carlton
woooo! I got creative and spent the evening putting together my first youtube video...based on this short story. I posted it about *looks at watch* 5 minuets ago but I figured it would be good to annouce it to anybody who was extremely fond of the story.