I don't call this a poem, and by no means am I saying it's not a poem because it is short. Emily Dickinson's "Fame is a Bee" was four lines long, but held a very true and heavy message (the mark of a master poet), but anyway I can't call this a poem because it is too philosophical for me and doesn't call back to the elements of poetry.
I didn't understand the "Jon Wise" thing either, I don't see where it fit in.
This is very short. How perceptive of me you might say! *Bows
I'm not sure about this piece. I'm personally a sucker for a good, quirky rhyme at the end of something like this to tie two thoughts together to make them whole. This just didn't fit into a hand held thought that I would remember. I guess what I'm trying to say is I think that you could have found something to rhyme with 'future' as juvenile as it sounds, I think I would have liked it better then. Call me immature, it's just my own thoughts.
Hope this helps,
Eimear
We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars.
That's very true what Ringo and Eimear said, but that's also true what the poem said! Well, I don't really think this as a poem, either, it's more like an aphorism. I like it much as an aphorism (I love that kind of stuff), but I don't get it as a poem, I'm sorry. So, aphorism – Yes!, poem – Oh, no.
Weird enough?
Demeter xx
"Your jokes are scarier than your earrings." -Twit
"14. Pretend like you would want him even if he wasn't a prince. (Yeah, right.)" -How to Make a Guy Like You - Disney Princess Style
Demeter stole the words right from under my fingertips. An aphorism I think best describes this, not a poem. But hey, that doesn't mean I don't like it!
*Pokes* Keep writing, let's see if you translate this into poem format!
