I thought this was really good. I loved your 4th stanza especially(not including the first line of the poem). My only suggestion is that you use some more linebreaks. The format seemed a little weird though I'm not sure if you wanted it that way. Very nice
Simple, direct, and says exactly what you want it to say. (at lease I assume so). Except for the first line which confused me because it's like midnight and I don't have the mental capacity to figure out if it means anything. As for the rest of the poem: See, you don't need cheap tricks to be good.
I like this a lot. It was very literal and narrative...
"Well we went to a movie and we went back to your house
and I am not a virgin no more, because I am yours [you are mine]
but we are literally oceans apart and I look forward to your scribbled
notes in envelopes with postcards from Greece."
