Heart Turns to Blue

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Heart Turns to Blue
By Angel of Death

Chorus

Faded dreams turn into vivid memories
When all my joys become my miseries
Life through my eyes turn a different hue
When my heart turns to blue

Verse 1

I tried painting my heart today
When I finished, my canvas was full of gray
And the colors on my palette were too
I tried to paint the joy in my soul
But my paintbrush let the pain unfold
My white canvas turned into gray and black
All of this was because of you
This is what happens when...

Chorus
Faded dreams turn into vivid memories
When all my joys become my miseries
Life through my eyes turn a different hue
When my heart turns to blue

Verse 2
My emotional gallery
Contains whats inside of me
When I was with you
My heart never was this shade of blue
You made me feel the rainbow
Sometimes you made my heart feel indigo
Then you left me that note on my bed
You made me feel all types of red
You took back all the "I love yous" you ever said
I threw away all my colors
And bought black and grey to replace the others
I did this all because of you
You made me feel blue
This is what happens when...

Chorus

Faded dreams turn into vivid memories
When all my joys became my miseries
Life through my eyes turn a different hue
When my heart turns to blue
True love, in all it’s celestial charm, and
star-crossed ways, only exist in a writer’s
mind, for humans have not yet learned
how to manifest it.




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What genre is this song? Pop, R&B, Country, what?
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I guess it could be Pop or R&B but I guess I was leaning towards Pop. This came to me for in my head one day I just start singing it.
True love, in all it’s celestial charm, and
star-crossed ways, only exist in a writer’s
mind, for humans have not yet learned
how to manifest it.




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Overall, I really liked this. I was, however, a bit confused. The main premise is that your heart is now blue, but in the first verse, you imply that your heart is grey and black. Which is it?

Keep writing! 8)
"You do ill if you praise, but worse if you censure, what you do not understand." Leonardo Da Vinci

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I'm not quite sure how this would be sang. I've been trying to hum a tune for it that fits? fast slow? i cant quite get it right. And melody?




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I love this Angel, you were brillant! You're not forcing the rythem or the ryme I'm really proud of you. This piece is perfect. You put alot of emotion into it and it's not ignored I love this piece and I think this would win a blue ribbon, just don't sell this to Brittney Spears lol. This is really wonderful.

Your friend, as always
-Max
We're meant to be one
I know we are...
If I am the Sky
Then you are my star... ™




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This seems sort of repetitives. I liked it, but it seems way too repetitive.

My suggestion would be to add more verses.

another thing is that the second verse doesn't seem to flow. but...idk. Lol. I just think it doesn't seem to flow. My opinion though.

Besides thoughs, I loved the meaning behind it. I loved the metaphor! Such an amazing picture!

Hope this helped.

Jamie



No, it's not that you didn't succeed. You accomplished a lot, but, if you want to touch people, don't concentrate so much on rhyme and metre. Think more about what you want to say instead of how you're saying it.
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