Silence Before the Storm

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Silence Before the Storm

Calm as the wind,
Like the leaves falling right now
Calm as the water,
So clear as it is seen like now
Peace like this doesn't come often like time,
Stillness as silent as the moment of sunrise

This is the bliss
Before the lightning is going to strike.
This is the calm
Before the night that we're going to have.
This is the moment
That before we are going to fall.
This is the silence before the storm.

As clear as the sunlight
That peered through my eyes.
As beautiful as the song
That I heard through my ears.

It's so calm,
So clear,
So still,
This morning dawn.

It's so calm,
So clear,
So still,
Softly,
Right here,
Listen.

This is the bliss
Before the lightning is going to strike.
This is the calm
Before the night that we're going to have.
This is the moment
That before we are going to fall.
This is the silence before the storm

Bright as the diamond
Right there in your hand.
Fragrant as the flower
Right here in my hand.

It's so calm,
So clear,
So still,
This morning dawn.

It's so calm,
So clear,
So still,
Right there,
Right here,
Can you see?

This is the bliss
Before the lightning is going to strike.
This is the calm
Before the night that we're going to have.
This is the moment
That before we are going to fall.
This is the silence before the storm.
Last edited by Acoustic Sensitivity on Sun Dec 23, 2007 3:36 pm, edited 1 time in total.




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This could use some punctuation, but otherwise it's cool.
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It seems too repetitve. It seems like you repeat the same almost exact wording over and over again. Like you didn't know how to make the song long enough, so you just used something you had already written. I like the idea, but I would suggest redoing a couple of the verses and rewriting it so that it doesn't seem repetitive.

Hope this helped!

Jamie




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Again, this is really good =]

I kinda ended up paying this, it's really good to put a tune with ^.^

This one isn't that repetive, you've evened out the chorus and verses, but the chorus' work in the song, it's cool so you can hearit quite a bit without finding it repetive.

Actally, the chorus is one of my favourite bits =]

The imagery is exceptional, and just the idea of it =]]

Awesome, Eva XxXxX
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tell me your in a band. because i want to hear this recorded.
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