Forget Me

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Forget me; forget me, I do not want already to cry, not
Forget me; forget me, I do not want already to cry

I had a love without shortcomings
It was perfect, it was a love really
Without agreement previous, anything for arranging
It did not want to lose it, wanted to keep it forever
He wanted that it was my love without end
And meanwhile I forgot to love
Full with waiting for me, you go away

CHOIR)
To cry hurts more, when I know that it was me who was the one that never understood
To cry hurts more, since I know that I am the reason, from what it went on to us

For not seeing that you were more real than a love
And to want that you were feeling what never existed

I had an imperfect love
With his shortcomings of love really
And I and we allow my fear to happen
Now when I understand it, you go away

And now I know that I loved you, realize and I already will not have you
Since already, you go away

(To repeat CHOIR)

And the pain will I have to support that all the time more?
Because you move away, today that you leave me, my love, my love

Forget me
Forget me
What is there to do when all else fails?




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This was very choppy. It didn't flow at all! I liked the idea, but it was also confusing. It seemed repetitive on the chorus. I don't really know how to tell you to improve. It needs to flow. It doesn't sound right. try saying/singing it to yourself outloud and see if it helps. XD Take the same idea and turn it into something that flows! XD

Hope this helped. Happy editing.

Jamie



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