Poem for Chevy

:dies:

i almost did cry...

OMFG!!!! This is sooooo good. Awww! It's soo sweet. I loved this bit:

like rainbow nail polish glossed
over broken nails

You have to keep writing. Your talent could go somewhere.

~Lollipop~

…Incan…you know, as cute as you are, if I ever saw you in real life, I might be morally obligated to run you over with my car…the nasty gray one, not even the cute convertible…you’re are just too damn good! Stop it! You make me look at my own stuff and feel like a phony…*sigh* Once again, a beautiful piece to add to the Brad wall of Fame with no critiques. A little snotty, a little condescending, but that’s just you. Lord and Lady damn you. : P

OMG Bras that was sooooooooo cool. You know you really have a future in writing.

:Gargles manevontly:
CHEVY YOU'RE SO LUCKY
I wish I were you
BRAD YOU'RE SUCH A GREAT WRITER!!
I wish I had your talent
WOW MYSELF I AM MYSELF
Can I please be somebody else?

I liked it, although it did seem kinda strange and awkward, yet you are the master of that

This is amazing, I love it. You are such a good writer!!! I envy you!
Just one thing:

"Cute phrases are not enough
syllables can no longer describe you
because you are pretty
like rainbow nail polish glossed
over broken nails"

The two 'nails' seemed a little ity bity bit repetitive. But the whole stanza was so lovely, perfect. Great. So good.

this was nice, fluffy gentle. I really liked the first three stanzas espeically, the feel of the third would have been better if I feel it had kept with the poetic format, I dunno I just feel that

Sometimes it’s easy to feel like the little white clouds on your fingernails, when there’s nothing left to feel, and the world has turned, leaving its tracks on your heart, please don’t cry, don't cry... because I can hear your sobs from here, and I know how you feel to feel that.

Was so good but would have been better in format with the other stanzas because then it would have been a shocking contrast. Something you weren't expecting as you let the rhythm and beat gently wash over you. That said I think the first stanza was good shorter, worked as an intro.

"like rainbow nail polish glossed
over broken nails"

Lines like those are what makes me like a poem! So inspiratinol, and i really didn't notice the repeditiveness between nails and nail until it was bvrought up, but it is still uberly great. (don't ask what "uberly" is)

I'd buy your book if you were to write one