That was good. It was amusing, and enjoyable. I liked the references to "On The Waterfront" and "The Producers". Yeah, I know a lot of movies. Sorry. Anyways, the dialogue was sounded authentic, and it flowed very well. The idea was really funny, and the ending made me chuckle. It's a nice little play.
Keep writing. Congratulations.
there are many problems in our times
but none of them are mine
But seriously, it was good. There were a few places where the dialogue seemed unnatural, but hey, what other problems could there be?
Also, I read something like this before. Not exactly the same, you've probably never heard of it, but at least the title reminded me. It's Words, words, words by David Ives.
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It was funny--but I liked your other one better. Still, this was the second best script I read on here!
Except you had too much stage direction. It made me feel like you thought I was an idiot. Use it sparingly, only when you think the actor would not understand what to do when they're performing it.
Yeah, monkeys! I guess monkeys can write some pretty good plays;D! I always make this mega-hott monkey at hte end of each comment so here it is; 0(o.o)0
I will review for you! PM about it if you need one!
First of all--brava! This is a wonderful little play; skillfully written and obviously well thought out. One of the best I've ever read on the site. I laughed aloud at the end, I'll admit, and I combed it for suggestions, but could find nothing. Well done!
