Final Fantasy

There is a Land of Fantasy,
where war has been waged.

The dreams of people destroyed
through a darkened rage.

The swords have clashed,
and heroes collapse.

The final battle is soon to come
Just be sure to replenish your soul
Before you are doomed.

After I tore your other poem apart, I saw this one...Here goes....

First off, you used punctuation and stanzas and I congratulate you for it.

There is a Land of Fantasy,
where war has been waged.

This was an okay beginning.

The dreams of people broken,
through a darkened rage.

I think that destroyed is a better word for the end of the first line. No comma after broken though

The swords have clashed,
and heroes collapse.

This didn't seem to have as much of a purpose for me....

The final battle is coming soon,
but all that left to do is,
replenish your soul before you are doomed.

I don't like the word but in the second line. Here is what I would do...

The final battle is soon to come (I changed it around a bit)
Just be sure to replenish your soul
Before you are doomed.

Just an idea. All in all, it's better. It could be a bit longer and it couldve appealed to emotions a little more. Rewrite it and I will look at it. Don't get me wrong, it wasn't bad. But it definitly could've been a lot better.

-Nikki

I thought this was a good peom. I liked the first stanza. Hee Hee!!

Not bad; I liked your second stanza, the wording flowed very nicely.

I liked the second stanza

I thought it was pretty good.

This was pretty. It could use some length perhaps to make it cooler, but depending on what you want this to be like, this is good

There is a Land of Fantasy,
where war has been waged. ..........nice beginning

The dreams of people destroyed
through a darkened rage. ...............This is good but I think you should even out the syllables in this one to make it flow better. Perhaps you could word the first line differently so it has less syllables.

The swords have clashed,
and heroes collapse. ...........pretty good, though the rhyming is not the best

The final battle is soon to come
Just be sure to replenish your soul
Before you are doomed.

Eh, ending is ok. I think you need something more powerful 'cause the way it is, the ending is pretty dull.
This was a pretty good poem... keep writing