Honor

Kylan · 2007-11-27T19:45:54Z

Synopsis: Booker Lee, a disillusioned member of the Black Dragon Tong (the Chinese-American version of the Mafia) based in Los Angeles and dealing heavily in the traffic of heroine, meth, human commodities, and less-than-legal services, is coming to terms with his past mistakes. He has a wife who is pregnant and is slowly realizing he is not fatherly material. Especially after he authorizes the slaughtering of a small family who couldn't come up with their extortion payments. His father, the leader of the Black Dragon Tong, who has died recently has left the command of the mob to a family friend. In the process of being pursued by the police for his most recent crimes, Booker appeals to the new leader for help only to discover in the process that a terrible conspiracy concerning seven billion dollars and a lot of dead bodies is being formulated by the upper echelon leaders of the Tong... -Kylan

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Mon Feb 11, 2008 4:08 pm

Aedomir says... · Mon Feb 11, 2008 4:08 pm

Is this the one which you said was about 50k of words? I'll read this in a it when I get time, and edit this post with a review but I'm sure you've ot loads already.

We are all Sociopaths: The Prologue

Sociopath: So • ci • o • path noun
1. Someone who believes their behaviour is right.
2. Human.

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Tue Feb 12, 2008 10:28 pm

smorgishborg says... · Tue Feb 12, 2008 10:28 pm

I hope you write a love scene for Terri and Mark at the end!

EDIT: It was fine...

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The woods are lovely, dark and deep.
But I have promises to keep,
And miles to go before I sleep,
And miles to go before I sleep.
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Thu Feb 14, 2008 2:39 am

Kylan says... · Thu Feb 14, 2008 2:39 am

Thanks smorg! I hope these next chapters aren't so predictable. Actually, not too much happens...

However, the section after this has one of my favorite scenes in it, so keep an eye out.

In reference to the love scene: I don't know. Maybe. Frankly, I just don't have the experience to write anything sincere. I'm guessing I did okay though, for what I did write?

-Kylan

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Tue Mar 11, 2008 3:02 pm

smorgishborg says... · Tue Mar 11, 2008 3:02 pm

I"ve been busy.

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The woods are lovely, dark and deep.
But I have promises to keep,
And miles to go before I sleep,
And miles to go before I sleep.
- Robert Frost

It cost $7 million to build the Titanic, and $200 million to make a film about it.
The plastic ties on the end of shoelaces are called aglets

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Wed Mar 12, 2008 12:29 am

Kylan says... · Wed Mar 12, 2008 12:29 am

This first scene is probably one of my favorite scenes.

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Mon Mar 24, 2008 6:36 pm

Kylan says... · Mon Mar 24, 2008 6:36 pm

For anyone who cares, I just finished this baby!

Three cheers for me!

-Kylan

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Sat Apr 05, 2008 2:08 pm

smorgishborg says... · Sat Apr 05, 2008 2:08 pm

Huzzah! Huzzah! Huzzah!

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The woods are lovely, dark and deep.
But I have promises to keep,
And miles to go before I sleep,
And miles to go before I sleep.
- Robert Frost

It cost $7 million to build the Titanic, and $200 million to make a film about it.
The plastic ties on the end of shoelaces are called aglets

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Sat Apr 05, 2008 2:28 pm

Kylan says... · Sat Apr 05, 2008 2:28 pm

I’m worried about what will happen to Eva, on one hand you could have her survive, but I’m not sure that would be really plausible enough. Careful how you handle that.

Just wait and see, my friend. Just wait and see. :wink:

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- Serenade, Adélia Prado

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