War.. (not finished yet... help would be appreciated)

Find me, above the sky
Above this dusty streets
Above the shining stars
There, where the sun don't feel the cold
Where I don't feel the pain
Find me, bring me home

The sound of my voice
You will forget.
The shine in my eyes
You will forget.
But will you forget me...?

My body you will burried,
Like love in your heart,
In the sand of my land.
In my mother's hope.

So tell me once again,
For what you're living for,
When you see blood on your hands
Of people unknown.
When you hear child's cry
and destroy, destroy...

What will you tell them
When you return home...?

A couple grammer mistakes:

"My body you will burried, "

"For what you're living for,"

Overall, this was good--as a normal lyric. I think you could do so much more with this: disgust your listeners, make them cringe whenever they hear the word "war", or maybe make them sad, forlorn. Ashamed.

Well, this was rhyming and all, but the build up to the cllmax was particularly inexistent and the repetition (ex. "destroy, destroy...") was spectaclarly irritating.