Ok.. I know it's kinda lame to submit something like this
But then again I couldn't find a better place to ask for help=P
So... I don't know it's asking too much of u guy's favours
but if any of u r so bored u and wish to read this
please please please critic on it
and btw, I know it doesn't make sense gramatically
and maybe there are some spelling mistakes
but if u do read through it, can u critic it
and tell me it's garbage or not??=P
also if it's possible can u kinda get main points out of it?
cause I'm utterly confused right now and dunno what I'm saying=P
Thanks if u do get to read it, and please critic it
ooo btw I know it's kinda garbage so please don't be generous
I'd rather hear what u really thought of then to be assured:)
Thanks
[pre]it seems like u've changed
we cannot communicate together
or is it me, being the close-minded
have turned away from u
I feel so lonely, near suffocation
trying desperately to relate to u
but I just can't seem to be able
and everytime i get further away from u
I can't explain what's inside me
but it feels like it's gonna explode
somehow I hav to let it out
in immature writing I try to calm myself
when my vision to my future suddenly reopens
to show nothing... nothing more than a blind
fantasy, a dream not worth of dreaming of
but then again u make me smile
my brain gets filled of hope that maybe
ur not gone at all, maybe it's just me
startled by sudden changes like an orphan
out on the streets, yes that must be it
but what use is it? when I cannot change the way
I feel about u and myself, and really
all I can do is to blindly believe
in something called fate, or the intricate feelings
between me and u if they ever existed
now I know y it's hard to believe, because
to believe means to give up, to be left alone
vunerable standing by myself, waiting for a person
someone that could come and help me, or not
with all these thoughts in my mind, I still cannot find
what went wrong between us, and somehow our bond
broke away, and what left meaningless
can we go back to the times? the times when we
were bonded together by feelings even stronger than love
but again, the times might not have existed
maybe it was all my hallucinations, and my own decieted
mind translating the easist motions to feelings that
never was comprehended...sigh
what use is this, when it's only me
and u r already so far away, too far to start over again
this writing I guess will be just a useless sigh
of a broken-hearted[/pre]
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