Forest Lament

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I can't take credit for this. It belongs to Jivaru, or Stella. She recalls the forest home she left behing to "see the galaxy."

'Neath the whispering trees
And the light of each new day
There my heart forever keeps
My song when I am away.

Under clouds in skies of blue
Under leaves of silver-gray
There my heart sings with longing
And forever I will stay.
"The one thing you can't trade for your heart's desire is your heart."
Miles Vorkosigan

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Wow! I like this a lot. What do you mean it isn't yours? Who is Stella?
my world isn't only beautiful
it is so far away




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A character... only I didn't get far with the story. :(
"The one thing you can't trade for your heart's desire is your heart."
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You mean that a character in your book wrote this?
Okay, whatever. This was incredibly cool. I love the rhyming--it didn't seem forced--and the imagery was simple but pleasing.
Keep it up!
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became everything i lost.


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It was nice but are you sure this is a song? It's more of a poem to me.




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Hey Kyte,
I like this. You have anice flow and the rhyming is clear affective and natural.
I also like the imagery, it creates a wonderful scene.
My only complaint: It's so short!
(Not exactly a complaint and if you've said everything the lenght is okay, but more would be nice :wink:)
Keep it up :wink:
~Kalli




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Loved it! This is really good :D


'Neath the whispering trees
And the light of each new day
There my heart forever keeps
My song when I am away.

I loved this part. Whispering trees, I really liked how you gave human characteristics to the tree. Very good.
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