stikkurz are for sad people

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You were the boy I always wanted to be.
*sounds like a good start to me. draws my attention*

I half-expected you to
live again *know how that is...*
rise up on floating clouds and brim prophecy and narration *good imagery*
but no such thing ever happened; *how do you know?*
and you laid there, fair and still, but that was all you did
when even in your ashes
you still touched the earth *vivid imagery. pretty*
(a raindrop to the ocean) *pretty*
and your existence was burned into our memories. *...perfect*

This storybook has come to a close
and I leave this stage to spring onto another and
I know in the morning, it will be hard to move without your presence. *very beautiful. storybook was a good word*

I mean, it’s not like I ever saw you then, *don't get this line*
but the mornings are now unbearable and my Bible
has been opened more times than you know,
the ink has receded into other pages from littlewaterdroplets *little water droplets? or did you mean to mush three words into one?*
forming and racing down my face and my eyes have not had a decent rest
in a week, with your blood on my hands I can’t even begin
to find solace in covers and the laughter of friends
is only temporary. *??? how is his blood on YOUR hands? It can't be your fault.*

Sometimes I try to forget you’re not here, but as soon as I open my eyes
I see baseball gloves that will never be worn again
except by the cold flames that flicker and dance and consume
every memory of you. *sweet.*




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Wow. This is beautiful. I can't find anything wrong with it.
"I am in a duel to the death with this wallpaper! One of us has to go!"~Oscar Wilde, right before he died




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Heyyy! I saw this on The Young Writers Club!

Uh.

Mad love.




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I think you showed this to me before but I don't think I articulated how much I really liked it. I have no criticism of this piece, which you should take as the highest form of compliment because I always have criticism.




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oh wait, I have one, actually: littlewaterdroplets

how many times have I warned you against cheap tricks brad, how many? otherwise, beautiful.



More than anything she wanted the world to be uncomplicated, for right and wrong to be as easily divided as the black and white sections of an Oreo. But the world was not a cookie.
— Roshani Chokshi, Aru Shah and the Tree of Wishes