heartbreaker

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Short, sweet, to the point. Basically, that is all I have to say.
Graffiti is the most passionate form of literature there is.

- Demetri Martin




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I really liked this. Brings back memories. Though, maybe you could expand it?

"but instead, we found worthless projector slides
and empty cans to kick around
while we waited on unpromised miracles
and the air to fill our lungs."

I love that... heh Nice work.




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Pretty. I like the personal aspect of it, it really adds feeling to the poem. A little more impact would be good, but the simplicity is very effective. Nice work.
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did you...change something?
when there's nowhere to go, it's time to grow up.



You got rid of them. Yes, that's just like you. Getting rid of everything unpleasant instead of learning to put up with it.
— Aldous Huxley, Brave New World