Words like Daggers

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Kimberlykat
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Thu Jan 03, 2008 4:38 pm
Kimberlykat says... · Thu Jan 03, 2008 4:38 pm
Sharpen your swords on
the grey rocks of pride.
Those tongues of yours even go
to scraping the hot asphalt.
Last edited by Kimberlykat on Fri Jan 04, 2008 2:44 pm, edited 2 times in total.
"By the rivers of Babylon we sat and wept
when we remembered Zion." Psalm 137:1
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Yagaron
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Thu Jan 03, 2008 8:53 pm
Yagaron says... · Thu Jan 03, 2008 8:53 pm
I agree with the message, but it was kind of short. I liked the part about sharpening swords on rocks of pride.
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Loranys Gellantara
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Fri Jan 04, 2008 1:43 am
Loranys Gellantara says... · Fri Jan 04, 2008 1:43 am
This was very short and got the message across. I do think that you could make it longer.
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Kimberlykat
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Fri Jan 04, 2008 2:54 pm
Kimberlykat says... · Fri Jan 04, 2008 2:54 pm
I'll try working on a stretched version.
"By the rivers of Babylon we sat and wept
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bethanyoverload
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Sat Jan 05, 2008 7:26 am
bethanyoverload says... · Sat Jan 05, 2008 7:26 am
i agree very much so with that point of veiw. They way that you conveyed your message was very well.


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