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Yes, I think she was the girl who sat next to me in Maths class in seventh grade. She was the one who used "acute angle" to describe cute guys...




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Last edited by Doctor Kitty on Wed Nov 13, 2024 8:20 pm, edited 1 time in total.




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it's... artistic?

Yeah ok, not the best sentence ever. Maybe the author was trying to be abstract but failing horribly?




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Pro-activ will treat that!




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Yeah, 'failing horribly' is pretty accurate.
I get what she meant - kind of - but its horribly purple and not very well-worded. >.<
But personally, I find it very encouraging. If that can be published, so can I! xD
everything i loved
became everything i lost.


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lol sentences like these give me hope. it's like, "okay, i AGONIZE over the word 'voice' in one sentence, and yet these authors are making a living out of publishing stuff like THAT. MAYBE I HAVE A CHANCE!!!!

maybe that's the wrong way to think about it, but whatever.
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Cpt. Smurf wrote:Tanith Lee? And there was me thinking we had a sneak peek at the next Paolini "novel".

That's exactly what I was thinking! D:
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I find that very purple.




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O_O

Are they twins, or something? Or is Paolini her son?
man hands on misery to man
it deepens like a coastal shelf
get out as early as you can
and don’t have any kids yourself.

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Yeah, they are cousins.




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I say that this Tannith person is actually Paolini's identical twin, lost in a parallel universe until she found a way to break into our universe.
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I say she must've made a deal with the devil to break in.
man hands on misery to man
it deepens like a coastal shelf
get out as early as you can
and don’t have any kids yourself.

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dun worry
it's all gun be k




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That devil fellow is easy to bargin with.




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Aet Lindling wrote:I say she must've made a deal with the devil to break in.

The devil probably gave her a thesaurus, too.
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