He Is

He is just to much to take in,

I don't know if those good looks or if theres something more


I just know my boyfriend can't stand him,

And meanwhile I can't help but smile


Because when they mention his name...

There's no way to explain that feeling in my stomach


I first thought he was cute and nothing more

and then something more happened


Now I don't how to get him out my head

How not to fall over when I see him


Not mention him in every converstation

Not to tell evey single person...


That I'm diggin on him

That I just may want to love him

I know EXACTLY what you are talking about The thing is, we need more details here.

There's no way to explain that feeling in my stomach

This sounds odd, and throws off your flow. TRY to explain it. "I got that feeling... I'm not sure, but I know I can't eat now..." etc.

and then something more happened

WHAT happened? We need to know. I'm currently thinking of Ariel in the boat with Erik.... :D:D:D:D

Overall, it was good. You can really delve into your emotions here. How do you try to get him out of your head? DO you even try? Are you afraid of what other people think? Of what HE thinks? Why aren't you with him? Seriously, what do you FEEL????
I mean, when I feel this, I start laughing at myself in my head, thinking 'wow, look at me, I'm freaking out.' Think of your reactions, your friends reactions, etc. :D:D:D
PM me if you have any questions. :D:D:D:D Keep writing. :D:D:D:D

Thank you! That was actually helpful and not painful!

You're welcome. I was trying to be helpful:D:D:D:D:D

And the smiles were a big help!

I hope you'll like my edit. Thanks again!

Good thing I added them :D:D:D:D:D:D
Do you need any other work to be critted?

Well not in here, but in Romantic Fiction I have some prose that goes unreviewed!

I could review some of your work if you would like !