Deliverance

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*Something short that I wrote as I was daydreaming.

Enclosing my view of the world, please get out of my head.
I open my eyes; all I see, all I desperately want.

You, you, you.

Your grip tears into my flesh, as mine does unto yours,
I'm begging to not let go.
Hair that sweeps ever so gently across my neck, sweetest ecstasy…
A touch too real.



Our breathing halts.



And let go, go, go…
Falling into you,

Take me where you'd like.




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Hair that sweeps ever so gently across my neck, sweetest ecstasy…


I absolutely adore this line simple because of the great imagery that I got from this

Overall I liked this quite a bit, and when your breath halted, I must say that mine did too

Keep daydreaming!
All the things of love you know
Are felt most when you let go




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You know how every once in a while you read something that is so genuine it makes you forget you're reading this on a computer screen... i think you just hit the nail on the head. Kudos.




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Well...Its really good.
Nice work!

Genevieve



Steps to enlightenment brighten the way, but the steps are steep. Take them one at a time.
— Cheshire Cat (American McGee's Alice)