Loved and Hated You

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Love and Hate?
Don't give me the speech.
Been there seen that.

Love will always equal pain,
Hate will always equal destruction of the heart.
Loved you and had you,
Had you and lost you,
Lost you and hated you,
Hated you, will never forget you.

Love is Hate
Hate is Love
You musn't forget,
these few simple words.
"Yes I'm Pretty, Not Beautiful. I Sin, I'm not a Devil. I'm Nice, I'm not an Angel." I Think You Know Who Said This One.




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Hi! I saw that nobody had reviewed this yet, and I was like, BWAHAHA, I get to be first! :D

I really liked this. It almost made me laugh, because I recently had a discussion about whether happiness is a simile for misery. Pretty weird stuff. I think you cover the topic nicely, simply, and without sounding depressing. My only complaint is the last two lines. "You musn't forget--" is telling the reader exactly what to feel. It ends a lovely, controversial poem with a lecturing tone.

But great job! I can't wait to read more!
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short and to the point. i really enjoyed reading this. you hit the subject right on.

Great job.

kim



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— The KotGR Commander