not the darkness that you seek, but the sun that you need

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inspired by Woman with Girdle by Anne Sexton.

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not the darkness that you seek, but the sun that you need

your hills are white capped, like ski mountains, alp mountains, just above the maritime line;
snowy white, and long veined like elephant horn, curled inwards and upwards.
your skin is malleable dough to be smoothed and molded by the motion of the rolling pin,
pressured and pulled, only to rise and form from the heat of some oven. you have
bone planes, a mass of interconnected rods and cones that make up the sight of you, the color of
milk and marrow, and soft like goose-feathers, gull-feathers, cloud-covered crow feathers.

you have been trapped in that city under the sea for so long you have learned to breathe through
blow-holes and cracks in preformed glass—beer bottle shaped and emerald green. and like Atlantis
remain mythic and hidden and lost, your language misunderstood and misquoted in all the world’s
dreams.
Fraser: Stop stealing the blanket.
[Diefenbaker whines]
Fraser: You're an Arctic Wolf, for God's sake.
(Due South)

Hatter: Do I need a reason to help a pretty girl in a very wet dress? (Alice)

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Interesting, but what's the point? The whole thing is describing someone, but who is it?
"The one thing you can't trade for your heart's desire is your heart."
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Interesting, I enjoyed reading it...but like Kyte said, what's the point?
Is it someone describing the Earth? Something like that?
:lol: Sorry if my guesses are way off but...:lol:
everything i loved
became everything i lost.


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I like the second part more than I like the first part. The first seems rather drawn out and almost overexpanded while the second part is new and mysterious that I can't help but want to read more. I wonder if I might like it more as a whole if the first part were evened out a bit with the second so they were equally emphasized.

What I like most is that at first glance, it looks like prose, but on a second look, it's clearly poetic. Nice, Cal!

-Amelia



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