Switching Lanes

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I don't have the music for the whole song but I'm working on it.

verse 1
C Am Em G
look at me now
Am C Em G
do you see the change
C Am Em G
can't play me now
Am C Em G
it's a different game

pre chorus
Am C G
you won't know me now
Am C G
that was yesterday, yesterday

chorus
i am not the same that you remember
this is a new day and i've changed now
i can't find a way to stay
i made a choice and i'm switching lanes
switching lanes

verse 2
C Am Em G
can't find me now
Am C Em F
i took a different way
C Am Em G
can't catch me now
Am C Em F
when i accelerate

pre chorus
you won't know me now
that was yesterday, yesterday

bridge
through the back window of my chevrolet
the coast is clear
and i'm switching lanes
when there's nowhere to go, it's time to grow up.




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Hehe, i like this, it's nicely done.

The rhyming is all good, maybe add some punctuation - capital letters. But i suppose this doesn't matter much seen as it'll be heard not read. :)

I love verse one,

"verse 1
C Am Em G
look at me now
Am C Em G
do you see the change
C Am Em G
can't play me now
Am C Em G
it's a different game "

It just flows nicely. I don't really have much else to say. Not that helpfull, i know...


Anyways, bye from meeee,


x
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I really like this! Your rhyming is really impressive!

My only criticism is that the second verse isn't very different from the first. Maybe after the first chorus, you could explain what the difference looks like. How exactly are you different?

Then again, that's just my opinion. The song is a very nice metaphor; I really like it :)
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It was very good and the message is something a lot of people can relate to in my opinion.

The song does seem to repeat itself throughout the verses.
The first verse is very good.
The second one could detail on how the new life is working out.

That is about all.
Good luck.
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