Loneliness

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Stori
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Fri Nov 02, 2007 5:14 pm
Stori says... · Fri Nov 02, 2007 5:14 pm
Don't use that trash can yet. This has potenial. One thing, though: don't end every line with a comma.
"The one thing you can't trade for your heart's desire is your heart."
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Fri Nov 02, 2007 5:29 pm
Stori says... · Fri Nov 02, 2007 5:29 pm
Japanese? You wrote this in Japanese? Wow.
"The one thing you can't trade for your heart's desire is your heart."
Miles Vorkosigan

"You can be an author if you learn to paint pictures with words."
Brian Jacques
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