Demonic Love

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Adel had a good night's sleep for the first time in his stay in the human world. The mornings were surprisingly cool for the summer and he loved the morning frost on the windows. The sleepy demon sat up and rubbed his crimson eyes and reached for a pack of cigarettes sitting on the bedside table. As he pulled one of the long thin sticks out from the pack the door burst open. One of the bed maids ordered to keep Adel's small room clean hurried him out of the room. Adel grumbled and turned back to the maid and muttered, "You got a light?". Before he knew it the castle was in full work mode. Many old bearded men waddled about talking so fast Adel couldn't understand them. The one armed guard stood at attention the the amethyst velvet curtains as usual.

Adel thought to himself I shouldn't get in his way...even though take him. He didn't want to make a scene on his second day. One of the old men walked up to the guard and pointed to Adel. Adel blinked and took a drag from his cigarette. When they finished talking he walked toward Adel, " You need to come with me, Madam Elena wants to speck with you..."

As the two walked down a long corridor, a group of young witches giggled and looked at Adel. Adel managed to hear a few of the whispers exchanged like: Ma'am was right, he is cute...or I wish he was my guard during the war. War? What war? "Ah...great..", Adel sighed. He loved fighting but hated to kill. He was bred to be a weapon. His father would call him a mistake, but then would take it back as soon as Adel got angry.

Adel and the guard walked into a large room built around a large hearth, glowing in a deep blue flame. The fire was magic in origin as Adel would learn later. On a pillow surrounded by what looked to be her maids and friends sat Elena. She smiled at Adel and urged him to sit next to her patting a cushion next to her. He blushed slightly and took his seat. Before them on the floor was a set of scrolls.

"We need to block the paladins from getting into the city gates. This is where you come in," she smiled and pointed to a picture that resembled a chapel,"Me and you will lure the paladin's commander into this church and try to peacefully discuss a resolution to his war. If that doesn't work...well...thats why i need you."

Adel nodded and blushed when he noticed Elena's hand on his. Trying to get the lump in his throat down, Elena ushered the maids out of her room. Adel blinked and watched them leave. "Why are they leaving ma'am?"

"You don't have to be formal Adel, I'm not your master as some seem to think around here. To tell the truth, I summoned you because...well...I lonely..." her gaze fell to the floor as she bit her lower lip, "and...and i thought i might find a friend. I just never knew I'd find a demon as handsome as you."

That was the first time anyone had ever called Adel handsome before. To be honest he didn't know what it meant but she smiled so he thought it was a good thing. Elena then blushed and leaned a little closer to Adel and said in a soft lovely voice, "Adel, do you know what a kiss is?" Adel nodded and gulped a little and smiled, "Yeah, i read about them in the texts i studied. You humans have weird forms of affection. I don't underst-" Elena then gently pressed her lips against his. Much to his amazement this thing called a kiss didn't feel half bad. Elena pulled back blushing madly. "W-Well...i th-think you should g-go get ready." , Elena stuttered. Adel sat in amazement, this is the first time anyone had ever shown him any kind of affection beside his father.

The demons tail curled slightly as he got up and walked half-dazed to the door. He turned around to see Elena rushing around to change out of her robes and into a dress. Wow...thought Adel I read about the human emotion love....but I never thought I'd ever feel it. With that, Adel sat on the ledge of the castle wall until twilight, remembering his first "kiss".




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-.-" Phew... your title kind of scared me there. I was thinking 'love... demonic...' OO"
Sorry, that's off topic. I do that sometimes. -.-*
Okay, there are a few typos, and the part where the guards are ordering Adel around is a little confusing. This sentence...

Adel thought to himself I shouldn't get in his way...even though take him.

...Doesn't make any sense. Maybe 'even though I could take him,' or something? <.<' >.>" >.<*
What I liked most about your work is how you made the princess a nice girl. To save time and space, lets just say it's refreshing. Her strong attraction seems a little sudden, but the way you've written it makes it sound like they've known eachother for a while.
"I've read about kisses..." that part cracked me up. Reading about kisses? That's classic!
Alright.... that's about all I have to say. Good job mon, and keep up the good work ^o^V
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