something i wrote to vent

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the subject matter is completely invalid now, since i'm dating the guy i wrote it about...hehehe...but anyway.


This wasn’t supposed to happen. I thought it was impossible; I thought I was safe. I thought you were safe. I thought nothing could shake the rock of our pure, simple friendship. You were my constant. Steady. Solid. As unchanging as mountains and stars and time. There was nothing complicated or confusing about us. When you leaned close and murmured softly in my ear it was with the voice of a beloved brother. Your touch was as innocent as a child’s. Your embrace was warm and secure and comfortable like the rough wool blankets we used to make tents out of when we were kids.

But suddenly I’m not safe anymore. My heart is now a wild thing, smashing through every carefully-constructed boundary I set for my emotions. Suddenly our friendship is not so simple, and your touch is not so childlike, and your warm breath against my ear sends goosebumps shivering down my spine. When we walk the halls together I am conscious of exactly how many millimeters separate my body from yours. The heat from your skin envelopes me, smothers me; it makes me clumsy and disoriented so that I accidentally bump into your shoulder and stumble over your toes. But of course you just laugh it off and ask me how long I’ve been walking. Your green eyes light up, and I am fascinated by the way your gaze seems to refract the light, scattering color and emotion and energy every time you blink. It’s hard to look at you but I want to look at you, to watch all those fireworks going off inside your head.

I am there at your game, because the dance is right afterwards and I need to take pictures for the yearbook. This is what I tell myself, because I am desperately trying to retain a sense of normalcy, a sense of control. But my blood is on a rampage, roaring like wildfire through my veins, and my mind has shut out everything but the image of you. Though my brain is in denial, I know that this camera clenched in my white-knuckled hands is just an excuse to be here. Close to you. So close I can feel the breeze as you charge past me down the court, like there’s lightning trapped in your bones and blood.

Your face is etched with deep furrows of intensity; your eyes are hard and dark like polished jade. Sun-bleached hair the color of a cornfield is shoved back on your forehead, windblown and sweat-streaked except for a few defiant strands that refuse to lie flat. You’re favoring your left ankle again, running with a slight a limp – so slight that only someone who’s played tag with you since third grade would even notice it. Worry punches into my gut as I see the lines on your brow deepen, a mask of wrinkles and creases that reveals just how much it hurts. Silently I beg you to sit down and rest, as much for my pain as for yours. But I know you better than that. You won’t sit down. You’ll play until you drop, until the lightning dies and the fire burns itself out.

There is something different about you now, something that was not there when we were younger. You have just discovered this disconcerting ability to captivate me.

This wasn’t supposed to happen. And for a few breathless moments after you ask me to dance I think maybe it isn’t happening – maybe my sanity has finally snapped and I am imagining you standing before me, all your light and color contrasting starkly with the black shirt and dress pants. My camera falls from numbed fingers and I stand, smoothing my black skirt and stammering a reply that makes no sense to my brain, mushy like lukewarm oatmeal. Then I lift my head and our eyes lock. For a few heavy, silent seconds I stare at you and you stare at me while the music throbs through our flesh, beckoning us to lend the movement of our bodies to the pulsing rhythm of the song. But for those few seconds we are rooted to the spot, and understanding dawns on us. I know and you know the instant you touch me our pure, simple friendship will quietly give up the ghost to make way for something that is not simple or familiar. It is a sober moment. Sad and moving and terrifying. Like standing on the edge of a cliff and knowing that you must jump off or suffocate on the land.

Then your hands slide around my waist, and I lean into you. Your embrace is secure and comfortable as it always was, but now I am trembling and tingly and you are tense under the palms of my hands. The warmth from your body and the warmth from mine mingle and meld, fusing into one blaze of energy. We dance.

This wasn’t supposed to happen. Because if these things hadn’t happened I wouldn’t be standing here now, watching the two of you through tear-blurry eyes. I wouldn’t feel grief stab my chest as she leans over and takes your hand, lacing her fingers with yours. Your snapping bright eyes flicker over her face and I see tenderness and loyalty shining there. I feel out of breath. I feel like crawling into a cave and never, never coming out again. I feel weak and stupid and selfish because I know you deserve her, but I wish to goodness that it was me instead.

Then you look up and your gaze scans the crowd and locks with mine, finding me in the sea of backpacks and makeup and basketball shorts and nose piercings. My face is blank, emotionless, stone-cold, but you know my pain despite my indifferent façade. You feel my throbbing sorrow because you know me better than I know myself. And for an instant I see my pain translate to you, flashing over your face in a look of sudden wistfulness, a longing for what could have been after that thick, dreamlike dance. I see the unspoken apology in your ocean-deep eyes, followed swiftly by the warm assurance that you still love me – no, not in the way my heart longs to be loved, but as a friend who knows you better than you know yourself. A fellow adventurer who climbed trees and skipped rocks by your side. A buddy who chased you around the playground. A fifth-grade companion who guided you through your first crush. Someone who will always be there for you, even when her heart bleeds because you are with someone else.

Friendship is strong. Our friendship is steel, forged from memories and long years and laughter. And for right now, that is enough for me.
"I can't stand him. His ego is splattered all over that screen and it's making me nauseous."
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I liked this. Strong message, excellent descriptions.

A friend and I just broke up after going out for about a month and a half. It hurts, it does. We'll never be friends again like we used to, and I'll probably never see her again...

Bah. Enough about me! Great writing, keep it up. :)




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i'm so sorry.! don't never be friends again! friendship is better than relationships anyway. stay friends, and maybe something will happen in the future.
"I can't stand him. His ego is splattered all over that screen and it's making me nauseous."
~Me referring to Ashton Kutcher.

"I think the dragon should eat him."
~My boyfriend referring to Eragon




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*coughcough* This subject makes me get up in arms, and.... well, anyway...

It was very well and very emotionally written. Nice description and all, and I liked the way you described the feelings being all...all. Just on thing:

Samara wrote:This is what I tell myself, because I am desperately trying to retain a sense of normalcy, a sense of control.


I don't know what's wrong with this word, but it doesn't feel right. Spelt wrong? Doesn't exist? Is used wrong? I don't know, and it's probally just me, but check that it's alright. :)
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ok, thanks. i'm pretty sure its spelled correctly, but i will check.

sorry i made you all defensive lol.
"I can't stand him. His ego is splattered all over that screen and it's making me nauseous."
~Me referring to Ashton Kutcher.

"I think the dragon should eat him."
~My boyfriend referring to Eragon




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It's a word, Tep. I think I remember something about Woodrow Wilson using that word to convince the nation of his plan, but I'm not sure.

Anyway. Who doesn't know this feeling? I went out with a guy for just over a year, and it's been about nine months since he broke up with me. We're only now starting to become friends again. Luckily, we had never formed a strong friendship before we went out, but our entire relationship was a strong friendship. He was my best friend for a while...

*cough* So. That being said. I loved all your descriptions! Very original, very detailed. Very original and intimate.

Great job! I'll have to look to this next time I need to write descriptions...
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Wow. That was amazing. I can totally relate too. Very good descriptions. I like how you said unchanging like mountains and stairs cause it's kind of an oxymoron since Stars and Mountains do change over Long periods of time. Or I'm reading to much into it.

It was really good. Nice descriptions and I'm glad your dating now cause it can hurt for a long time.
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normalcy - Yes it is a word but I don't think it's the best choice. Perhaps normality? I think that one would work better.

That said, this piece is well written and I think everyone can relate to it. I remember the first day when I realised the boy who lives next door to me who I used to hang out with all the time was good looking. And I mean really good looking. Lol. My friends had been telling me so for years but I never noticed it before and then it got rather awkward... Anyway, that was a long time ago and dwelling on the past is a very very bad idea.

Basically, you write well and you picked a good subject and I'm very happy that it worked out well for you!
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I'm glad this no longer applies to you, because it's so sad! I'm sorry you ever had to go through a feeling like that.

Anyway, great job on the writing itself. Wonderful description, blah blah, *repeats every gush everyong else just said*

I've never gone out with anyone, so I can't relate in that way, but your great writing style really helped me understand what it's like to be in love or even a serious crush.

Good job again! Yours most truly, 8)
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i myself have spent many a night deep in thought and sorow over whut u wrote. im also happy for u that now everything works out. and if u feel truly as impasonate as u wrote (whenever u wrote it) then ull know that whut u have is sacred and not to be misused. for many who find love misuse as a means for an end. dont do that. if whut u wrote is true and i belive it is then youve known this guy for a while. i myself no longer spend my nights writng of sorow or pain but of love and life. for i too have found my one and only. (then of course knowing me ive read to much into this and taken it too serusly but if i havent then there u are my opinion about absolutly nothing at all)




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wow, thank you guys so much! you have no idea how encouraging that is.
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This is amazing, I've been through this before - and the other girl was one of my best friends, too. But I'm over *that* guy now. [was not worth the trouble after all]. I loved your descriptions, and agree with everyone else complimenting and such.

Have you ever heard the song Teardrops on My Guitar by Taylor Swift? That is the first thing that came to my mind when I read this - you've captured the exact same emotions. Except it's words, not a song. I loved the style, and whilst I suppose it did help that I knew what you meant...I'm really sorry you had to go through that, and I'm so glad you are [sorry if this is outdated,but that's what you said.] going out with him now!

Fantastic piece, although rather depressing.
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hehe, yes, as a matter of fact we are still together.

(sorry, this is Samara, my old account was being dumb so i had to get a new one.)




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:(I'm so sorry.:(

I liked how you repeated the line "This wasn't supposed to happen". It worked with the rest of the piece and was a good first sentence for the paragraphs that you used it in. AND it wasn't overused, as words/lines/phrases sometimes are.

Then you look up and your gaze scans the crowd and locks with mine, finding me in the sea of backpacks and makeup and basketball shorts and nose piercings.


I'm not a fan of using the word 'sea' to describe a crowd--even though it does figuratively describe the crowd very well--but I feel that this worked because you didn't write 'sea of faces' or 'sea of bodies', but instead you wrote a list of things that could be seen in the crowd.

Well done. It's a very emotional piece.
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