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Now, this story is entirely true. It happened quite a while ago, sometime early last year I think. I had always intended on writing it down and getting it up here, but somehow it always slipped my mind. A couple of days ago though, I had perhaps the scariest dream -- the scariest experience in my entire life (to be posted later) and while drenched in sweat, heart pounding, there was one thing in my head: I had to get this story on here. So here it is:

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The old man sat still, staring irresolutely at the chess board in front of him. No one sat opposite him. It had been like this for three days now, he walked into the library, sat on one of the cushions in the foyer then set up a chess board; waiting. I hadn’t said anything, just walked on by each time.

I felt restless today though and upon entering the library, gave the old man a pointed look. He smiled and motioned to the chair opposite. Intrigued, I moved closer, sitting in the proffered seat. “Well, I’m white, so I go first.” He said, sucking at his lips, making smacking sounds. He moved a piece forward; I countered and so we began to play. After a moment, he said suddenly, “Did you know chess is one of the oldest board games in the world? It started around the 1400’s.”

I stared. “Umm, okay.” Thanks for the pointless trivia pops, I thought irately. Frowning, I examined the board, and then moved my horse forward. Smiling serenely, the old man seemed not to care that it was his turn. I waited impatiently, tapping my foot. “Come on then, hurry up.” I said, glancing at the clock on the wall. I had to go soon. The old man started, glancing around as if just realising where he was.

“What? Is it my turn?” He asked curiously. At my affirmation he snapped, “Well then don’t rush me!”

And so it continued. Over a period of weeks, I challenged the old man and always he regaled me with pointless questions, trivia and nonsense; covering a variety of subjects including the distance of the sun, Solomon and the Queen. I weathered it though, having little better to do after school, waiting for my mum to close shop. One day, I questioned him. “Do you believe in God?” At first, he said nothing, and the smacking of his lips never abated.

“Yes.” He calmly moved another piece forward. “I’m a Jehovah Witness,” he said.

“Really?” I asked, intensely curious. All my friends had stories of these people coming up to their doors and their reactions to it; slamming the door in their faces, and one once stepping out with a visible pentagram on his chest, hissing in anger. It was funny, but I had never had the chance; it was as if they instinctively shunned my house.

“Yep, that’s right. Been one for nearly 40yrs now.” He continued, bobbing his ancient head. I raised my eyebrows, trying to hide my excitement. I’d hit jackpot!

“Wow,” I said, hiding a smile. “That’s dedication for you.” Smiling, he nodded and continued sucking his lips in that extremely irritating fashion. I told him of my being Muslim and we continued to talk about religion, when he said something both interesting and disturbing: “You know, I’ve been attacked by the devil seventeen times in my life.”

I blinked. “I’m sorry, what now?”

“You heard me. That’s why I’m so sure I’m on the right path.”

In light of this news I reappraised the old man. His errant, messy white hair, once giving him an innocent air, now looked the affectations of a mad man. His eyes, flickering to and fro over the chess board, seemed to gleam with a strange intensity I hadn’t noticed before. I’m sitting beside a complete loony, I thought with increasing incredulity. He’s insane! Rather then deter me, this interested me all the more and I leaned forward.

“Seventeen times you say?” At his nod, I continued. “Could you describe one such attack for me?”

“I-I remember … ah, that last time. It happened when I was about 47, no 52 …” He seemed confused and dazed all of a sudden. “Well, it was around there anyway, that I had a nervous breakdown.” Ah, that would explain a lot. “I was on a train, when it happened and I began tearing the cushions to pieces.” Note to self: Mental Breakdown=tearing stuff to pieces. “And that’s when a policewoman came into the train and pointed a gun at me!” Oh and I wonder why, I thought sarcastically, yet keeping my face blank and attentive.

“The policewoman pulled a gun on you?” I asked, interrupting. “Was that the devil at work?”

“Yes, exactly.”

“So, what happened?”

“An angel saved me.”

“ … Come again?” This man gets nuttier as the seconds go by.

“An angel saved me,” He repeated. “Knocked the gun out of her hands.”

“And, uh, what did this 'angel' look like?”

“It was tall, around eight feet high –

“Male or female?” I quizzed, halting him again.

“No, no, no!” He said, shaking his head, becoming irritated as if I should know this. “It was neither. It was—

“Did it have wings?” I asked, this time unable to keep the sarcasm from my voice.

“No.” Thoughtful now, he added. “It had a small goatee though.

“But it wasn’t a male?”

He shook his head in the negative. This was fascinating stuff; it so trumped anything that had happened to my friends. Game entirely forgotten now, I said, “And then?”

“Then it got me a cup of coffee.” His voice never wavered, just kept on steady as if we were discussing the weather. He actually believed this. I didn’t ask the obvious; where the hell did an angel with no gender, no wings, but a small goatee get a cup of coffee from on a moving train …?

“And this isn’t the only time such an event has occurred?” I asked. “Why is it, do you think, that you are so important to the devil—to be attacked 17 times that is.”

“Well now,” he said, smiling beatifically. “That’s cos I’m on the right path now ain’t it?”

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And there it is. Every word of it true. Hope you enjoyed lol.
Last edited by Jiggity on Tue Mar 06, 2007 9:04 am, edited 2 times in total.
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I must say, this is quite an interesting story. If you're telling the truth - that this actually happened, word for word - its one of the strangest stories I've ever heard.
As a piece of writing, it was good to read aswell. Very clear and the interjections of the narrator's thoughts are well placed. Absolutely nothing is lost in the translation from reality to paper. Well done.

One question though: do you still see this man? Have you managed to delve any deeper into his religious experiences? I'm just interested. :wink:
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I'm here to repay a critique!

You are missing commas in some places...only twice, once in the first paragraph and then once in the second.

Yep, that’s right. Been one for nearly 40yrs now.
is that proper? "40yrs"? I've never seen that used before, in fiction at least.

Rather then deter me
than.

“The policewoman pulled a gun on?”
I'm only guessing you missed the word 'you' though this could be on purpose.

“And, uh, what did this “angel” look like?”
It should be single quotes (') around angel. 'angel' because its already inside double quotes (")

“No.” Thoughtful now, he added. “It had a small goatee though.
missed the quotation mark at the end.

Just little errors, really. I enjoyed it so much! The topic was really grasping, I'm not sure what I can say about it.

My favorite part was the main characters (Possibly you?) reaction to the old mans dialog, his thoughts and such. "Note to self: Mental Breakdown=tearing stuff to pieces." it added a sarcasm to the story that I really liked.

And this really happened? Makes it even better. I'm looking forward to the second one!
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That was one weird old man! Was that really real? It's a gd story.Doesn't really capture your imagination though.Add more description maybe.
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Yes it was really real and no Inertia I dont see him anymore; not too long ago he stopped going to the library. He reappeared once, not long ago, but since then I havent seen him. He was a weird old duffer. Thanks for those little mishaps 'dette! Oh and this isn't fiction, as you mentioned.

Cheers, all.
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The saying is true here: truth is stranger than ficiton.

I enjoyed this. Whatever critiquing I could've done was already done by Claudette, so there's no point in being redundant.

Good show, boy.




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Heh, that should have been the title. Truth is Stranger then fiction. Makes sense, actually. Thanke for the comment.

Is there any particular reason you sounded like an old englishmen just then, 'good show'? Lmao, but thanks anyway.
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Weird,that.I've met ( okay,encountered and heard about ) JWs,but they wern't nutters like this at all,just sad,because they're following the wrong path.Maybe this bloke was an odd case.
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*sigh*
I'd like to state for the record that Witnesses really are just trying to help when they show up at your doorstep.
(& I would also like to mention that slamming a door in someone's face or trying to scare them off by looking like a Satanist is incredibly rude. Just say "no, thank you." It's not funny, it's just mean.)*
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Your friend there is a nutter alright, but not because he's a Witness.

“You know, I’ve been attacked by the devil 17 times in my life.”

That should be in a new paragraph, otherwise it looks like that's what the narrator is saying.
(Also, the numbers should be written out, they're only two digits.)

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Yes well, I never implied that his insanity was linked to his religious orientation.

And I dispute your "its not funny" comment, its actually quite hilarious but then things of this nature are--I am not, however, denying that it is rude, just saying that there is definetly a humourous element... but then, each to his own.

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The train sped along, creaking and rattling. It was a typical day, freezing, obscenely early and I was surrounded by people just as disaffected and irritated as I was. I struggle to rein back a huge yawn, and failing miserably, shudder as it wracks my body.

Someone stomps up the stairs. I continue staring at the landscape flashing past, hoping against hope no one would sit next to me. There is a slight downward pressure on the cushion beneath me and a grunt; I glare now at my reflection. Things we’re not going my way.

‘Hallo!’ someone says.

I turn, surprised to find myself being addressed. A man, hair slicked a little at the front, wearing a mismatch of tracksuits, was staring at me with an intensity bordering on maniac.

‘Uh...hello...,’ I said, looking away again.

‘My name’s John! What’s your name?’

I ground my teeth. I stare again at the too-wide smile on the man’s boyish face, on any other day I would have been charmed by his mentality, now though, I was just pissed.

‘Omar,’ I said shortly.

His eyes went round with surprise, and glancing around, he leaned closer. ‘I have a friend named Omar,’ he whispers. He is at a loss for a moment, eyes unfocused, before suddenly beaming again. ‘You’re my brother now!’ he proclaims happily, touching my leg.

I shift away, ‘Great,’ I mumble, determinedly staring away.

For a long while he says nothing, and then he asks suddenly, ‘Can I have a lighter?’

He looked like a demented leprecaun, sitting, grinning and twitching. Saying nothing, I turned up the music.

**

I was standing at a bus stop. Traffic lights shone in the darkness, and I shivered against the cold, periodically leaning out, hoping for a sign of the bus. Serbian music was pumping from a nearby nightclub and I wanted nothing more than to go home and sleep. I stare out at the road.

Out of the darkness, a figure loomed, shuffling and limping.

I step back sharply, heart pounding, all sorts of zombie scenes flashing through my mind. Bit by bit, the figure comes into the light: a pale, hairy leg, followed by a scruffy looking school jacket, and then a tousled, greying head is revealed. One eye is glazed and unfocused, I see as he leans in toward me.

I move back even further, preparing for the barrage of ‘have you got any spare change?’ accompanied by some ludicrous sob story—‘I just need two dollars to save my child from being executed in Saudi Arabia by the Christian Right underground movement, I swear!’

I encounter nothing of the kind, however.

‘Did you know,’ the man says, slowly, calmly and in a high, perfect British accent, ‘that people from the Eastern Suburbs are really charming?’

My mouth hangs open, stunned. He may as well have told me he was the Emperor of Galacton, Planet of the Uber Suave Fish Lords.

‘I’m sorry, what now?’ I manage to stumble out.

‘People from the Eastern Suburbs,’ he repeats, ‘are just really charming.’

I just couldn’t get over that accent. He sounded like a member of the Royal Family for gods’ sake.

‘Okay...’ I said.

He nods at me, before walking onward into the night. He hadn’t even asked me for money. That, more than anything else, really scared me.

**

For some reason, these things that happen to me, odd as they are, always occur on the public transport system, or nearby. Just the other day, I was minding my own business on the bus home when a dishevelled, tattooed man sat on the seat opposite me.

‘Remember me?’ he says.

I have a vague recollection of someone from Pirates of the Caribbean, but nothing solid comes to mind. Mutely, I shake my head.

‘From rehab? The On the Road program?’

My eyes widen involuntarily. He stops smiling, seems embarrassed and ashamed now; his poorly kept secret is out. ‘Uh...no,’ I confirmed, and he nodded sadly.

‘Sorry...you looked familiar is all.’

I have some interesting encounters, that’s for sure.
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