Trevor [Deceased]

"Blob. Blob. Blob."

That's all it does.

"Blob. Blob. Blob"

A heavy sigh escaped my lips and made a small patch of mist cloud over the glass, as I sat with my face close to the round bowl. Inside, a shimmering gold fish swam in neverending circles, ejecting spirals of bubbles which glided to the surface.

I drew a small and simple fish into the clouded surface with my little finger, bored out of my mind and regretting agreeing to such a thing.

My mum had said; "Why don't you get a job? 'Cause that's the only way you're ever going to get money for those stupid boots."

By "stupid boots" she actually meant the most sophisticated item of footwear mankind has ever seen. The "Retro 9000 Rollerboots" called out to me when I first saw them on the advert. They told me that I must buy them, but what they forgot to mention was the price.

"One hundred and fifty pounds!" my mum had screamed when I told her. In fact, thinking back, she choked on her cup of tea too.

Anyway, so the only way I could get the money for the boots was if I got a job and saved up. So that's what I'm doing, looking after an old woman's goldfish while she visits her daughter in Paris.

It's so boring though. All he, Trevor, does is swim in circles and wait for the next time I feed him, when he devours every single flake in a fraction of a second.

I sigh again and stand up, reaching for my ham sandwich and taking a bite, watching Trevor bump against the side of the bowl. Peeking a glance at the clock, I gasp and realise I'm missing Coronation Street.

I ran out of my room at full speed, sandwich in hand as I practically threw myself down each step of the staircase, reaching the living room in world record time and taking a seat on the sofa, settling down as the opening scene began, peeling the crusts from my sandwich.

My cat sat and watched me, hoping that I'd be generous and share some ham with her, then giving up and walking to the foot of the staircase, glancing back at me and then trotting upstairs with a flick of her tail.

It wasn't until the end credits that she came back down, purring like the engine of a well tuned moterbike and nuzzling against my feet. She dropped something on the floor and pawed at it, lying near my feet as I watched, with mild interest. Then I saw it...

Bright orange colour. Bright orange...FIN!

"No!" I shouted, startling the feline, who scampered away quickly with her prize, still purring.

I ran upstairs to check, to comfirm my suspicions which were correct. I let out a miserable moan and sank down onto my bed, pulling out the money I had been given and putting it on the bed.

Maybe I could wash cars instead...

Hahaha, this was very cute. And a true story too, I'm assuming? (It is in Non-Fiction, after all.)

I'm glad you were able to find some humor in your situation. And good grammar! That's always a plus.

I just had a couple of rephrasing suggestions:

A heavy sigh escaped my lips and made a small patch of mist cloud over the glass, as I sat with my face close to the round bowl.

A little too long. Try shortening this sentence. Maybe: "I was sitting so close to the round bowl that one heavy sigh clouded over a small patch of the glass." ...Is that even shorter? Gah, I'm no help.

I drew a small and simple fish into the clouded surface with my little finger, bored out of my mind and regretting agreeing to such a thing.

Again, feels a little long/convoluted. Maybe: "I drew a small, simple fish into the clouded surface with my little finger. I was bored out of my mind and already regretting [insert clever/amusing phrase involving servitude to a goldfish]."

Beyond that, I had no complaints. A very enjoyable read.

I really like this story It's quite amusing hehe.

There's one thing i'd say though,

All he, Trevor, does is swim in circles and wait for the next time I feed him, when he devours every single flake in a fraction of a second.

Here i'd of probably left out the 'he' and put:

All Trevor does is swim in circles and wait for the next time I feed him, when he devours every single flake in a fraction of a second.

I don't know why, i just like the sound of it better.

But other than that, i think this is super.

This may be because I'm fussy, but I found a few things I had issues with that the others didn't.

They told me that I must buy them, but what they forgot to mention was the price.

This bugs me. If it was on an advert, telling you to buy the shoes, then the price would be mentioned. How else would the mum know they cost "One hundred and fifty pounds"? You really should reconsider that.

In fact, thinking back, she choked on her cup of tea too.

Hehe, she choked on the cup? I know we're all clever people here, and we know what you mean, but you have to consider others, say sport-junkies, who are slightly less intelligent in means of literary description and the like. It is easy for a younger reader, or even an older reader, to confuse this sentence with the mother swallowing the cup and choking on it. Perhaps:

"She choked on the tea she was drinking, if I remember correctly."

But, as I stated, I'm fussy.

Anyway, so the only way I could get the money for the boots was if I got a job and saved up.

If you read this aloud, "Anyway,so" sounds sloppy. It should either be "Anyway" or "so", not both. Although "So" isn't really a good choice because the next sentence starts with "so"

All he, Trevor, does is swim in

As Sarah said, neither the "he", nor the commas, should be there.

I ran out of my room at full speed, sandwich in hand as I practically threw myself down each step of the staircase, reaching the living room in world record time and taking a seat on the sofa, settling down as the opening scene began, peeling the crusts from my sandwich.

All one sentence? Classy...

In other words, a big no-no!

My cat sat and watched me, hoping that I'd be generous and share some ham with her,

And you didn't! How could you? Animal cruelty! My cat always gets some of my ham!

My cat sat and watched me, hoping that I'd be generous and share some ham with her, then giving up and walking to the foot of the staircase, glancing back at me and then trotting upstairs with a flick of her tail.

Again, one sentence. Not very popular amongst... me.

tuned moterbike and nuzzling

Motorbike.

my feet as I watched, with mild interest.

You really don't need that comma.

I ran upstairs to check, to comfirm my suspicions which were correct.

Confirm.

"I ran upstairs to confirm my suspicions. They were correct."

Tidy!

Other than that, this piece was very cute. Well done!

Hehe. Poor fishy... very nice story though. I liked it