Elegy / Goodbye-poem

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you get a crit ticket, just for that last line.

-crit ticket-
The good parts of a book may be only something a writer is lucky enough to overhear or it may be the wreck of his whole damn life — and one is as good as the other.
Ernest Hemingway




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Lol. The imagery was brilliant and I love how you uphold the serious tone until that final line. Brilliant. I must say that some lines were a little confusing but that only adds to the charm and everything makes sense by the end. To be honest, the only thing I found wrong with it was the punctuation in your first stanza. I would suggest -

From the first moment
the dead lose currency;
o
pen casket or closed,
in the descent,
edges blur, memory begins
to resemble people

An excellent piece of work though so well done.
Writing Gooder

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You're wrong about humanity. They are your greatest creation because they're better than you are. Sure, they're weak, and they cheat and steal and destroy and disappoint, but they also give and create, and they sing and dance and love. Above all, they never give up.
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