RED

comment away, let yourself loose

red nights are the nights where i feel dead/ all the troubles in my head/ drowned out by the things he said/ amplified by everything we're fed/ red nights are the nights i dread/ and dream for/ maybe tomorrow/ we'll all be sorry/ for everything we've done/ and we'll pray for the sun to come back/ and make everything ok/ because tomorrow is another day/ for us to dream and fight/ and maybe tomorrow will be alright/ it was red tonight maybe tomorrow too/ and i want it because im only red with you.

god, it was way too rambly. And the red font is just a gimmick; if you need to lean on that, then the piece can't stand on its own. Also, put in some lines breaks for Buddha's sake! I Didn't even want to look at it, it was so block-of-texty

But yeah, fix those first.

Lose the red text, fix your grammar, set it out like a set of lyrics and then you're half way there. Also, you need verses and a chorus.