The Visitor

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Oh life so dull of thought,
A treasure is no jewel.
In stars it twinkels like the day,
A forest has no thorns.
He told of days memory does not hold,
A dream is so like life.
No tale but imagination his,
A flower draws no wasp.
I sat in wonder true to my ears,
A window is an eye.
His eye so bright it reflected me,
A jewl is not a crown.

I got a little bored and had a lot of oximorons and random lines in my head, here is the result! :)

Tigi x
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Hehe, this is very random indeed. I can't help but sink in the tragic randomness you've created here. Try sorting out your mind, seeing the line apart from each other is half as bad as seeing them together.

You've got potential, show some of it ;)

Cheerios, Chandni
I should not keep on, I'll just creep on creepin'on.




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Well, random lines in your head become random lines on a piece of paper. Not any better.

My recommendation is to keep them in your head (or better yet: right down ideas you have in a notebook) until you think of an actual subject for your poem[s]. Then you can call on these additional images to sprinkle on your work, and weave them into your theme. Happy writing.
~Ed
The good parts of a book may be only something a writer is lucky enough to overhear or it may be the wreck of his whole damn life — and one is as good as the other.
Ernest Hemingway



perceive me if you want to, i will exist regardless
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