only human

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We are only human.
We are only scared.
We are the only ones,
who never really cared.
We are only human,
and we are clearly lost,
but why did we run away,
when we knew it'd do no good.
do you care?
no but you really,
really should.
Last edited by wewinwelose on Mon Jun 04, 2007 9:56 pm, edited 1 time in total.




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I liked this. Even though it is short it has a lot of meaning.

We are the only ones,
who never really cared.


I like thse two lines. They are the best lines in the poem because they give across the meaning.

Can't wait to see more of your work!
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This was interesting, but two things put me off is the rhyming and the constant repetition of only. Other than than the rhyming issue and other one. I reckon this poem could be much longer if more worked on. Try editing it and making it more personal, like maybe examine the issues more. I liked it, but I'd recommend rewriting it. Also poems don't need to rhyme remember that.
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This is really good. I think you should break it up into two stanzas. You have a good theme going, and you could easily make this poem longer. Also, the last two lines threw me off because they halted the rhyme scheme, but that's easily fixed.
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