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I need a plot critic, simply put.

PM me if you're interested.

More info later.

[EDIT]

Alright. The genre is fantasy/paranormal/romance/a bit of adventure and action.

You can see it as a mix of Eragon and Harry Potter.

Basically?

A boarding school for werewolves and vampires.

Sure, the two species have not been regarded as the top two most friendliest types of beings, but when you're in the School of Shades, you're busy concentrating on a certain spirit called "Lilith".

Imprisoned deep within the Schools in the form of three parts (an amulet, a crypt, and a student in the Schools), Lilith is known as the mother of vampires, who was captured early on by Canus, the headmaster of the schools, then imprisoned in those three parts, to keep from turning all of mankind into vampires.

She's got a husband, Samael. And he's not happy.

Which means it's up to these three students- Valentine Carter, Mina Cullen, and Keiran Kendall- to keep Samael OUT and Lilith IN.

/End Summary.

Lilith and Samael are real mythical creatures. They are both in Jewish folklore.

Now are ya'll interested? >.<
Last edited by PerforatedxHearts on Thu May 10, 2007 12:17 am, edited 1 time in total.




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Why don't you just post it here on YWS? Or contact reviewers who you respect?
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Yeah more info now would help a bit :D Anyway, i would always be willing to help out :D

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Bah, I love bothering people about their plots- so, count me in! :wink:
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I like reading things I don't have time to read....

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Alright. I'll edit it to make some more info. Sorry. I was in a rush, and I didn't have time. Neither do I have it right now, but I'm alright.

Wow. I didn't know so many people would offer to critique a plot.

I'm overjoyed.
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Alright. I have an announcement:

It's not a story that you're critiquing.

It's the outline of a story that I'm making.

Claudette just informed me about this. I thought that ya'll should know.

So...PM me with your email addresses if you still want to critique a story outline, alright?

Sorry for the confusion.
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